Day from night, white from black, these are the feelings when opposites attract. Wrong from right ,statement from fact, this what its like when opposites attract. My love to your love, dog from cat, these are the feelings when opposites attract. Genuine from original,hesitate from act this is the feeling when opposites attract. Hearts of the same water from flame, passion and the look in your eyes brought new horizon in the minds sky's. A traverse feeling turned inside and out threw the minds eye without a blink. Wondering to this opposite because you would never attract. So you listen to your perception that your mind is using deception. Unconditional love requires no right or wrong in the war to attract. Maybe I don't no myself because my wisdom is not strong enough to distinguish how I feel from how I act. I do know now that opposites can attract . . .
2006-12-06 07:48:40 · 20 answers · asked by marolt4 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
cool
2006-12-06 07:55:41 · answer #1 · answered by Andrew L 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm sorry, but I keep picturing Paula Abdul w/ a cartoon cat singing "I take 2 steps forward, u take 2 steps back. We come together 'cuz opposites attract..."
I see what you're going for & I like it, but maybe you should consider a different phrase like 'when worlds collide' & corresponding rhyming words... or something like that.
2006-12-06 07:54:45 · answer #2 · answered by Rocker Chick 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's all over the place man, it's like your trying to bring out to many different themes under one Grand Theme. So it's need work, good start.
2006-12-06 07:51:22 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
you started really nicely, but then lost the rhyme and rythem, the use of words is nice, it does 'attract' interest. but u should refine the second half, and post it again so we can read the rest.. best of luck
2006-12-06 07:53:12 · answer #4 · answered by MAB 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Near the end, it gets a bit sketchy, but the rest is great.
2006-12-06 07:54:35 · answer #5 · answered by flapjackwars 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was really good!! Could I copy it and send it to my Pakistani friend? He'd love it!! I love poems!
Krazy Libra
2006-12-06 07:52:28 · answer #6 · answered by krazy_libra_from_ac 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
very good.. try going to http://www.postpoems.com and publish them on there and sometimes ppl will come talk to u from book companys wanting to out then into a book and stuff
2006-12-06 07:54:56 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats cool think think poems speak for the heart
2006-12-06 07:51:37 · answer #8 · answered by Kefka 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
u should publish it
2006-12-06 07:51:11 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
OMG that was beautiful. i like writing poems too but that was amazing!!! ive never written nething like that. U MUST have been writing about some1 specific, if so shes rele lucky bcuz that was the best poem ive ever read. u should try to get a books of poems published. I RELE liked it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D
2006-12-06 07:52:46 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋