Yeah, I like it...makes you think.
2006-12-05 19:09:53
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answered by ♥austingirl♥ 6
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It is not a good poem because you cannot posses the characteristics of god and the Devil. Been humane and inhumane. Capable of been a perfect dual human personality. you must either be god or satan. you cannot be very late. If you are late at all, we say you are late. No need for the 'very' in the late. And maybe i should add here that you probably meant 'God' not 'god' by virtue of the import of the phrase 'iam the end to it all'.
2006-12-06 03:38:15
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answered by timbarr_law 1
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It sounds like heavy metal lyrics, so it's good for that. The point of heavy metal lyrics is to be gnarly and sound tough.
I think a good poem is supposed to help you think about life in a new way. What are you really saying with this poem?
2006-12-06 03:26:40
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answer #3
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answered by danieltalsky 2
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I enjoyed all but one wee part... "i am man,i am god". If you truly want to encompass all aspects, you should change it to reflect the tone of the rest of your words. As a suggestion, possibly go with the absolute contradiction...
i am love, i am heat, i am human
i am hate, i am chill, i am monster
i am you, i am me, i am they, i am the end to it all.
And if you meant "hate" and not "heat", then go with the same concept changing as desired. It makes it more powerful, more deep, and comes off as enlightened. Good luck!
2006-12-06 06:27:59
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answered by wldhrt_29 1
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this is not very good poem. It's lack of feel and direction.
There are a lot more good poem out there.
2006-12-06 06:05:21
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answer #5
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answered by man_1433 2
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if its base on logical thinking..and if theres a poem as logical..then its a good poem...but if we'll talk about the standards or components of a good poem..its not
2006-12-06 04:31:03
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answer #6
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answered by yucanzee 2
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sorry i don't really care about it because your not GOD,your the center of GOD,please change some words in it. xo
2006-12-06 14:59:13
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answered by cilia 3
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TECHNICALLY speaking, it's a bad poem :/
2006-12-06 05:24:43
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answered by Anonymous
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it needs some improvement
2006-12-06 03:20:47
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answered by Anonymous
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Uhm... don't want to hurt your feelings, so... yes?
2006-12-06 03:50:04
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answered by Anonymous
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