which one is better?

Question

Christmas is a time for gladness,
With eggnog filling lots of glasses.
The Christmas spirit you can see
For presents 're under the Christmas tree.

With all the stockings over flowing,
The fireplace is brightly glowing.
The hot chocolates steamin', the marshmallows 're meltin',
And the family's inside merrily decoratin'.

Tinsel and lights twinkle away.
The sounds of bells remind us of sleighs.
The smell of ginger and pine
Help us reminisce the olden time.

After eating candies and cookies galore,
The children are ready to explore.
Snow on the ground crunches under their feet
While mom's inside baking another good treat.

The children had lots of fun
Now that the day is all done.
They're too excited and can't fall asleep.
They've tried everything, from lying still to counting sheep.

The parents are putting up the last touches for Christmas,
While the children's' night is extremely restless.
The children don't dream of sugarplums this night;
They're too busy wondering what their presents will be like.

Would Santa Claus come again this year?
For the bells on his sleigh, you never could hear.
Not one of the children have ever seen that jolly old soul,
But their parents are good friends with him, or so they are told.

Christmas is such a beautiful day.
It's the feeling of giving that makes it that way.
The gifts are all open, and the day is now done.
The best thing of all is that Santa DID come!

OR THIS ONE:

Thanksgiving has passed
Its Christmas time at Last!
I've been waiting all year
to spread Holiday Cheer.

My tree goes up early,
its my favorite part
lovingly placing each unique ornament,
to create our special work of art.

Lights line the roof tops,
the christmas music never stops.
Big plastic Reindeer, (and santa too!)
fill people's yards for us to view.

But the truth is,
that this is not what it seems.
Thats not ALL that Christmas means.

Giving to others
and helping those in need,
gives us a feeling
that its true what we read.

Christmas is about love, giving, and hope.
Not dolls, clothes and that special jump rope.
It's about happiness, sharing, and spreading the cheer
in hopes that these feelings will never disappear.

Answer 1

the last one seemed to roll better than the first.

Answer 2

The first one is pretty good. Some notes: away and sleighs don't exactly rhyme. Neither does time and pine, or melting and decorating, Christmas and restless, night or like. S5 has no rhyme scheme. Soul and told don't rhyme, neither does done and come. Stick to a rhyme scheme of abba or abab throughout the poem. Don't switch it around.

For the latter one, passed and last don't rhyme, neither does early or ornament, is/seems/means don't either, others/feeling don't either; S4 here is missing a line. Maybe your best bet is to choose a rhyme scheme or go with free verse. As which is better, the first with pretty good rhymes.

Answer 3

I think the second one is very exciting and nice.your a great poet.your poems are amazing.And I'm not just saying that.your great really.if i needed a poem or wanted a poem id come to you.your really great!

Answer 4

The last one is the best.

Answer 5

I think they are both very good. were you asking which Holiday we like more or which poem we like more? I like both poems and my favorite holiday is Christmas.

Answer 6

I prefer the second one.