For those of you good at English, Is this a run-on:?

Question

In such an environment, my penchant for people as exemplified by my past experiences in various leadership roles, wherein I have organized fund-raisers in support of relief for hurricanes Ivan and Frances as well as social mixers to unify minority students, would undoubtedly allow me to cultivate culture and community service to what I am sure is already a gifted student body.

Answer 1

Yes. It's also awful. Any time more than one thought exists in a sentence, it's a run-on.

My zeal for people -- as exemplified by my experiences in leadership roles -- would shine in that environment. Cultivating culture and community service among what is already a gifted student body would be another feather in my cap, like when wherein I organized fund-raisers for hurricanes Ivan and Frances relief, and social mixers to unify minority students.

Answer 2

It is. What you need to do is break it up, you honestly cannot have over four lines of text and not one period or comma inbetween.

I kind of chopped it up for you..
In such an environment, my penchant for people is exemplified through my past experiences in various leadership roles. I have organized fund-raisers in support of relief for victims of hurricanes Ivan and Frances, as well as constructed social mixers to unify minority students. Experience in such matters would undoubtedly allow me to positively cultivate culture and community service to what I am sure, is already a gifted student body.

Good luck I hope you get it.

Answer 3

It's not a run-on sentence. It's wordy, though. You might want to consider changing it.

Answer 4

yes, it needs a few commas, but worthy of any politician alive today.

Answer 5

It's complex, but I wouldn't classify it as a run-on.

Answer 6

yes it is