one more simple question?

Question

See this one, and correct them to natural sentences plz

He should have gotten out of it in the fifth floor, but since the elevator was stopped in the sixth floor, he had to have gotten out of it in sixth floor. He was highly surprised because of the polished scene which spread before him. There were too many women, and soon after, he felt they were laughing at him again. Fortunately, there was an escalator so he took it.

and what about this sentence? I can't make it better sentence

He bumped a woman while he was striding staring at the ground.

what about this

Then he saw refined people. He found wearing shabby clothes himself.

Answer 1

Is this any help?

"He should have left the elevator on the 5th. floor, but, since it went to the 6th floor, he exited there.
The polished scene, which spread before him, surprised him greatly. There were too many women and he soon felt they were laughing at him again. Fortunately, he was able to escape by elevator."

"While striding, staring at the ground, he bumped into a women."
or,
"He bumped into a woman while striding along, staring at the ground."


"Then he saw refined people. He felt he was wearing shabby clothes.

Or did you mean: "Then he saw refined people, after which he felt he was wearing shabby clothes""

Hope this is some help.

Answer 2

They are pretty good already, but it's hard to tell if the quirkiness should be adjusted to your writing style. Please give more context around this paragraph so we can judge accordingly.