In this sentence does the first use of the word "genocide", the one in parenthesis, seem redundant? Should I take it or should I leave it?
Hotel Rwanda in my opinion, backed up by the actual historical records says that George romanticized an unpleasant time in history (the genocide) as he reworked the historical material to heavily tone down the intensity of the genocide violence.
2006-12-04 17:32:59 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
Make the second usage of genocide "genocidal" instead. Genocide is a noun and since you are using this word as an adjective it would be better to use the adjective form. Also, have someone check you punctuation.
2006-12-04 17:38:58 · answer #1 · answered by Ellen J 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You're right. The first genocide is redundant in the given sentence
2006-12-04 17:38:10 · answer #2 · answered by young_friend 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree with both the first two answers. And the second use of the word has to be an adjective not a noun.
Brendan E
2006-12-04 17:44:20 · answer #3 · answered by Brendan E 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would say so. I 'd suggest the word 'violence' is too. I'd also chuck in a comma after the word 'records'.
2006-12-04 17:44:26 · answer #4 · answered by the_fatmanwalksalone 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋