Title "Dreaming with bugs"
I had have a lot of dreams
in which I am cover with a lot of bugs,
they follow me and never leave me alone,
spiders, cockroaches, crickets and more.
Sometimes I had even dream a dog (yes I know, it´s not a bug)
but he is ready to bite my behind,
destroy my body and leave me there
until I will bleed to death... all alone.
Someone once said "Have your friends close,
but your enemies closest", well... I do not want this...
I love my freedom and my empty space,
and I don´t want to dream with bugs again
which in my dreams, turned into people who yelled at me.
Why can´t I have dreams about my friends,
metallica, movies and all those things I do enjoy.
Perhaps this dream has a true meaning...
"Leave your enemies to destroy themselves
and surround yourself with your really friends".
2006-12-04 15:19:58 · 5 answers · asked by Finy 6 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
Rock on little one
2006-12-04 15:28:36 · answer #1 · answered by Sir CJ 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, you may want to consider writing in more of a prose or essay style. This is a little incoherent but that's not necessarily a problem for poetry. The best poetry, though, as in any type of writing, communicates a particular message to the reader or touches the reader in some way. You may want to brush up on your grammar as well. Keep writing.
2006-12-04 23:28:24 · answer #2 · answered by hairdvs 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think its a good poem. It's TOUGH to write poems. Keep'em short & sweet..or not so sweet..but simple. Keep on writing & sharing:)
2006-12-04 23:43:57 · answer #3 · answered by Cr 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
wow
2006-12-04 23:21:44 · answer #4 · answered by heyrobo 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Another poem please.....
2006-12-04 23:30:34 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋