ok,i wrote this but i don't like it..it could be an emo song maybe!!!(i have nothing against emo though!)but i think the words are too flat...please help!!!i have a tune and i just need to find the lyrics...but these are so common!!
lost in the maze of your words/
i try to find my place/
you were so good to me/
back then/
you were so true to me/
but you changed
now i don't know where you stand/
the words you say are never right/
i try to find a reason why/
but all i know is that you lie/
you lie
knee deep in all the lies you told/
i've been so blind/
how could i know/
i believed you/
you betrayed me/
i trusted you/
you backstabbed me/
i know you lied
2006-12-04 08:02:43 · 10 answers · asked by Billie 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
When you say lyrics I think song. Doesn't sound like a song to me as much as it sounds like free form poetry.
I like the first line.."lost in the maze of your words" very clear, artistic. maybe after the second line you could say..
you were so good to me back then, though you hid your double face,
you were so true to me/ but you changed before my eyes,
just your lies, just your lies.
In the second verse: drop the "but" just say; all I know is that you lie; then repeat it ...all I know is that you lie
In the final verse, try
knee deep in all the lies you told/
could I have been so blind/
I stumbled in my belief of you/
and you betrayed my heart and mind/
I trusted you/you back-stabbed me/
I now know that you lied/
you lied/ you lied/ you lied
just my opinion hope it helps
2006-12-04 08:43:29 · answer #1 · answered by Daystar 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I have under no circumstances heard of Epicurus instead of as a night time membership downtown, to be sincere. Now, approximately your quote. God is ready and inclined to preclude evil. So on this case, the query is "Then whence cometh evil," right? Here's the article. God adored us all such a lot that he gave us all unfastened will. So why enable people who opt for to activity that unfastened will toward evil to take action? Why enable the pain and the evil of guys? Simple. We ought to endure. It is aspect of the autumn from grace that we suffered in Eden. Or, should you best see Genesis as metaphorical, as I do, there is a greater explination. We are a lump of steel. God is a grasp sword smith. God tempers us, throws us within the hearth, and beats us, enabling us to endure, and all of the at the same time He is popping us right into a lovely sword. So why perform a little individuals appear to get all of the breaks in lifestyles? They're no longer being tempered good. They're being tempered poorly. They don't seem to be being pounded and fired on this lifestyles. They shall be tempered within the subsequent. They were lovely sufficient to grace the partitions of the beginner sword collector that's this lifestyles. However, it's people who endure who're tempered greater and turn out to be have compatibility to enter the Heavenly sword museum or, greater, into the last wrestle in opposition to Satan, considering the fact that they have got long past via the extra extreme and extra thorough tempering and thus is not going to holiday below stress, best bend a bit, then return into situation comfortably. So particularly, pain is well for us. Hope that is civil sufficient for you and some distance sufficient for you from the identify calling and the whole lot. I did my fine to deliver an sincere reply. And with no Bible quote, even though I can give that, if you would like.
2016-09-03 12:44:28 · answer #2 · answered by yarrington 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A little personal. But good. Send it to Trent Reznor. He could do something with it.
2006-12-04 08:05:36 · answer #3 · answered by mreed316 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well thats good...i ahve a friend that writes music and those lyrics are a lil bit genaric...sry cant spell..lol. but yeah they are used in a lot of songs like that..but other than that they are good! good luck w/ your song...i'll buy ur CD lol
2006-12-04 08:10:30 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that's pretty good....you could add something about how you have been betrayed.
2006-12-04 08:09:11 · answer #5 · answered by INSANE SUGARPUFF 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
They sound good to me. You done a good job I like it.
2006-12-04 08:10:49 · answer #6 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would change line 6 "but you changed..." to "back when..."
Very emo, I ike it.
2006-12-04 08:07:33 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good... but get rid of the word "backstabbed"... it's a little long....
2006-12-04 08:08:19 · answer #8 · answered by trackstarr59 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad
2006-12-04 08:47:24 · answer #9 · answered by Judas Rabbi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
are you goth you *****?
2006-12-04 08:05:10 · answer #10 · answered by blackmallbirds 4 · 0⤊ 3⤋