Tell me if you think these poems are good:
The Moon
The moon is shining
Brightly in the night
Only whispers of darkness fright.
Stars make dots
Lining the sky
Then the moon kisses darkness good-bye.
It tells the flowers the message
The stars too
There is also a message
For me and you.
From sadness and mourning…
The message…
Good Morning!
here is the second one:
My Best Friend
Sharing moments.
Sharing tears.
Remembering memories
Of the past years.
Saving each other from doing crimes.
Always there during hard times.
I hope the time will never end.
The time I have with my best friend.
Type what you think
2006-12-03 15:11:51 · 11 answers · asked by hmw95 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I wrote these by myself. Thank you.
2006-12-03 15:15:42 · update #1
by the way, you should be amazed. I'm 11 years old.
2006-12-04 13:54:12 · update #2
They have potential, you have talent but they seem very teenage diary.
Keep writing and get involved. Like anything, it takes practice and determination to get better.
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2006-12-03 17:24:53 · answer #1 · answered by Cowboy Logic 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad!! A bit on the amature side, but keep at it and I'm sure you'll be an excellent writer one day!
2006-12-03 23:20:35 · answer #2 · answered by Mithrandir 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think those poems are awesome!! I would've never been able to write something that good!!
2006-12-03 23:14:02 · answer #3 · answered by ♥ Sydd 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the first peom i liked how you used the expressions of the moon
2006-12-03 23:15:21 · answer #4 · answered by Thrills 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW. Beautiful writing. I wish I could write like that. LOL.
2006-12-03 23:14:40 · answer #5 · answered by icesurfer360 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked both of them! They both flow well. Plus they both have good ideas to them. Great job!
2006-12-03 23:19:04 · answer #6 · answered by chromecranium 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like the first one a lot. It is very pretty.
2006-12-03 23:14:34 · answer #7 · answered by sunrisesover12th 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the 1st poem
2006-12-03 23:13:38 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I have seen better.
Coach
2006-12-03 23:18:47 · answer #9 · answered by Thanks for the Yahoo Jacket 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
What grade are you in?
2006-12-04 00:18:41 · answer #10 · answered by amor fati 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋