read this passage and see if there are any grammar, or spelling errors.?

Question

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One difference of the novel Treasure Island and the film (the same name) was the personality of Jim. In the novel treasure Island Jim sounded he was brave, honest, adventures, and mature. In the film Jim was a cry baby, acted like a child, and made sad faces when he was heartbreaking. Their personalities were distinct. This was like having a twin but have a different personality. Another difference is when Billy Bones has a stroke; Jim and Mrs. Hawkins take something from Billy bone’s sea-chest and run. In the film they run to a place and in the novel they run to another place. In the novel Jim and Mrs. Hawkins take the package found in Billy Bone’s sea-chest and run under a bridge. In the film Jim and Mrs. Hawkins take the package and runs behind a bush. There are other differences like when Jim comes back to the stockade after he cuts the Hispaniola lose and sails it to the north inlet, John Long Silver says that Dr. Livesey and the others think he was a

Answer 1

I haven't got time to give more than a few tips.
...difference BETWEEN the novel... (not of)
... and the film OF THE SAME NAME, (no brackets).
Crybaby is one word.
...run to one place... run to another... no need to repeat "place" ("one" sounds better with "another")
Capitalize the title of the book and seperate it with commas from the rest of the sentence.

Answer 2

Sure, I love proofreading. Here's my revised version (This sort of essay should be in present tense so I made it so):

One difference between the novel Treasure Island and the film of the same name is the personality of Jim. In the novel, Jim is brave, honest, adventurous, and mature. In the film, Jim is childish and made sad faces when he was heartbroken. [I don't like the way "crybaby" sounds in there, but if you want to put it back in I believe it is one word.]Their personalities are distinct. The two are like twins but have completely different personalities. [I would revise that, it's sort of confusing] Another difference reveals itself when Billy Bones has a stroke; Jim and Mrs. Hawkins take something from Billy Bones's sea chest and run. In the film, they run to a place and in the novel they run to another place. In the novel, Jim and Mrs. Hawkins take the package found in Billy Bones’s sea chest and run under a bridge. In the film, Jim and Mrs. Hawkins take the package and run behind a bush. There are other differences such as when Jim comes back to the stockade after he cuts the Hispaniola lose and sails it to the north inlet, John Long Silver says that Dr. Livesey and the others think he was a

Obviously it was cut off there.

I may suggest, for future reference, when editing on your own, you read the last sentence, then the sentence before it, then the sentence before that, until you get back to the beginning. I catch a lot of errors that way.

Answer 3

It should read, "One difference between the novel Treasure Island and the film of the same name was the personality of Jim. In the novel, Jim sounded brave, honest, adventurous, and mature; in the film Jim was a crybaby, and acted like a child. The personalities were distinct."
And then later, cut out the line "In the film they run to a place" etc. Make it read, "...from Billy Bone's sea chest and run. In the novel they run under a bridge; in the film they run behind a bush." Hope you can see everything I changed there!! Anymore questions, let me know.

Answer 4

You made some errors:

* When ever you wrote the word sea-chest, you were wrong as we do not use a hyphon (-) in it. We write it sea chest.

* When you used the word cry baby, it was wrong. We write it crybaby. We don't leave a space.

* In the word Hispaniola, I think it should be Hispania.

Hope I helped.