rate my poem please!!!???!!!!?!?!?

Question

its called i need a real man!!!!


i need a real man
1 who will love trust protect and treasure me.
i need a real man
1 whos not afraid of tears
cuz he is only human and he has emotions too
and he knows i wont think any less of him because he lets his emotions show.
i need a real man
1 who can trust to tell me any and everything
and know that ill never judge him
but im only human so ill have my opinions
but in the end ill still be there for him no matter what
i need a real man
1 i can come to with my problems or when in need
even if he cant solve them
at least he tries and is there to help me through
i need a real man
1 i can trust with my all
tell my deepest darkest secerts
and br assured it will stay between me and him.
i need a real man
1 i can love with my all
and hell feel the same
i dont even have to ask cuz he shows and tells me everyday how he

feels
i need a real man
1 who dont play games cuz though we aint grown but growing
were moving on to bigger and better things together
i need a real man
1 who will never bring a another into wat we have
cuz im all he wants and needs
the one he disires and will do anything for.
i need a real man
who ill be with
together forever
no matter wat till death do us part
nothing nor no one can ever come between me and my man.
now thats a real man
and baby i promise ill do the same
ill be your real woman
all i ask is that your my real man

Answer 1

I think you should change the name of that poem to "I'm insecure"

Answer 2

It seems to end rather abruptly.

In poetry, each line should begin with a capital letter, and you should not use text abbreviations or figures. The word "cuz" should be written "because" and the shortened version of "I am" is "I'm". The shortened version of "who is" should be written "who's", don't forget the apostrophe. When you refer to yourself in the first person, you should write "I" and not "i".

You have some good ideas and communicate your feelings well. If you sort out your grammar and punctuation your poem would be a much better piece of work.

Answer 3

It seems heartfelt, but the lack of correct spelling is a little too much of a distraction for me.

Even if it were spelled correctly, though, it would sound a lot like a Hallmark card or someone's self-written wedding vows.

Don't take it personally, I take poetry critiques really seriously, that's all

Answer 4

i like it, but it seems to be missing something. I don't know what just something. The inbetween i need a real man gets longer as the poem goes on. I liked the shorter ones better.

Answer 5

About a 2/10, it's sweet but it's more like a list and has a lot of cliches.

Answer 6

I don't like it. It has sort of a vague rhythm, but not an actual metric pattern. And you shouldn't use the numeral 1 as a substitute for "one" that's short for "someone."

Answer 7

7 out of 10 - I like the content, but the spelling is driving me crazy...

Answer 8

Oh my goodness!!! Thats such a powerful poem..
I've read so many poems but this is sooo.....good doesn't even come close.
Breathtaking, spiritual,powereful, moving!
I honestly loved this poem! Please write some more Ill find it. Im so going to save it!good job

Answer 9

I LIKE THAT RHYME-LESS POETRY. IT SHOWS THE REAL WAY U FEEL, WITHOUT LOOKING FOR RHYMES. IT'S REALLY MOVING WHEN U READ IT, LIKE IT COMES RIGHT OUT OF YOUR HEART. IT DESERVES A 10.

Answer 10

I don't know, it sounds like your just describing what your looking for in a man..But hey keep trying..

Answer 11

I like your poem. You should finish it. I need a real man like that too!