opening frase to applying for employment:...
Im sending you my cv to apply for the job in subject.
my current study at college will indeed carry on for the next 2 yrs mininmum in which when possesing all my electrical certificates this in no way does gaurantee me a job so i can offer a mininmum of 2yrs loyalty to your buisness
2006-11-30 21:39:39 · 10 answers · asked by dant 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
yes it does look bad.
English spelling and grammar is not yet one of your strengths.
If possible at all write your letter in your native language.
Don't go into unnecessary details. Be short and to the point.
If you need to write it in English get a friend who has a better command of the language to help you.
2006-12-01 01:23:37 · answer #1 · answered by convictedidiot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Besides the horrific grammar, punctuation, and spelling, which will get your letter tossed right in the trash, you're basically saying "I will stay with your company for two years unless I can get a better job somewhere else when I graduate." That's really dumb. A hiring manager is not looking for some schmuck to sit at a desk--a hiring manager is looking for a talented person to do a certain job.
A letter of application should state what your qualifications are and why you would be good at the job you're applying for. The fact that you'll be around for the next two years doesn't make you a good candidate for anything.
2006-12-01 15:48:10 · answer #2 · answered by supercheesegirl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes, unfortunately it does look bad. However it's no excuse for some of the comments here, at least you're having a go.
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2006-12-04 20:15:37 · answer #3 · answered by Crewedaddy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You don't want to send this, you won't get any job offers.
It's hard to help you out since it's not even clear from this letter what it is exactly that you want to communicate.
And as noted by others, correct spelling and punctuation is the absolute minimum.
2006-12-02 00:00:26 · answer #4 · answered by Ladida 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have the basic concept right but id recommend you ask someone who speaks english to help you rewrite it.
2006-12-01 15:02:07 · answer #5 · answered by Brian M 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your application has poor English.
2006-12-01 12:45:00 · answer #6 · answered by Stay Puft Marshmallow Man 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-12-01 05:49:41 · answer #7 · answered by ian s 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
spell minimum right on your application
2006-12-01 05:42:01 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
not bad terrible.
try to use plain english.
2006-12-01 13:02:13 · answer #9 · answered by sashs.geo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
go on, giz a job!
2006-12-01 13:43:00 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋