okay please don't talk about my spelling if I spell sometin wrong... K?
If you ever find yourself,
Wanting to fly off the bridge...
Just think of all the friends you've had
and all the life youv'e lived.
Just think of all the poems youve made
and all the lives youve touched
Think of the people who love you.
And how they'll miss you much.
2006-11-30 09:15:23 · 16 answers · asked by Courtney 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
I loved this one...It's a very sweet poem about showing someone a reason not to take their own life .... Truly,Heart warming!!!! And I should know..I'm a published Poet...It shows warmth and tenderness....It also lets me see inside your heart.And I see a warm,loving person..
~hugs~
2006-11-30 09:28:32 · answer #1 · answered by ladybug 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
honestly, well, it's endearing and a positive message. it's proactive and tells a reader what and how...but in dealing with such a serious issue, it's almost very juvenile sounding only because the voice and tone of the poem make suicide sound like a little dilemna that you could turn around yourself...in other words: a light and fluffy tone for a serious topic. but i'm guessing that you didn't mean to be saving lives by this, but merely to be shedding light to the sweeter side of life, even when one gets low. generally a thoughtful poem...the rhyming is pretty good too. nice sentiment
2006-11-30 17:20:26 · answer #2 · answered by ndf 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not a bad rhyme sceme. You should try to match the syllables in each line to give it more flow, a la Hip Hop. Otherwise your pretty good kiddo.
2006-11-30 17:20:32 · answer #3 · answered by Richie D 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like your poem, everyone needs to think about who they are leaving behind, before they do something as drastic as leap off a bridge.
2006-11-30 17:21:35 · answer #4 · answered by HazyMary 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG that is tottaly awsome. You should send it to a poetry contest or publish it in a book. Post it on line
2006-11-30 17:51:57 · answer #5 · answered by Sar' bear 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, its short, simple ,to the point and gives a great moral message. Keep it up.
2006-11-30 17:24:35 · answer #6 · answered by loufedalis 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a very sweet poem. Good job!!
2006-11-30 17:41:41 · answer #7 · answered by 81% Naughty, 19% Nice 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's good! I like it. Makes me feel good for some reason.
2006-11-30 17:56:39 · answer #8 · answered by Little Alice 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THUMBS UP! I think it has some meaning to it.
2006-11-30 17:19:05 · answer #9 · answered by GRUMPY 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
it didnt rhyme... it should rhyme or you might as well just call it a paragraph.. and about how good it is.. if your like 12 or so.. thats perty good.. if your like 20 or so.. keep working at it
2006-11-30 17:22:15 · answer #10 · answered by JTM 2 · 0⤊ 3⤋