Is this a good haiku?

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Is this a good haiku?

Fall
The refreshing change
That this new season brings us
Brings new hope to all

2006-11-29 11:42:44 · 2 answers · asked by Skittles 4 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help

fall is the title not part of the first line

2006-11-30 07:39:14 · update #1

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not really sorry.. with a haiku you need to describe the season (or anything in nature) using verbs and adjectives:

Winter

Sparkling ice trees
glisten in the sunlight melt
snow covered fields shine

2006-11-29 11:54:42 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋

Your first line "Fall the refreshing change" has six syllables and it can only have 5. You could say fall the pleasing change... besides that it's really good.

2006-11-29 22:32:40 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋