Can you fix this sentence? It just doesn't sound right to me...thanks!!?

Question

One can clearly see that some of the children in the grade one class spoke a different language to the teacher than the language they used to communicate with their peers

Answer 1

One can clearly see that children in grade one classes speak a different language to the teacher than the language that they use to communicate with their peers.

Answer 2

You can shorter up the sentence along with changing your tenses. Here's what I would do:

It is obvious (change 4 words to 3) that some of the children in the first grade (clearer than grade one) speak (it is only spoke in the past tense, keep your sentences active and in the present) a different language than the teacher. (the last part of your sentence is not necessary, if they speak a different language then it obviously is not the language they use with their peers)

Answer 3

The tense switches from the present "see" to the past "spoke". Change it to either:
"One could clearly see..."
OR
"...speak a dfferent language...they use to communicate..."

Answer 4

Keep the sentence all in one tense, the past or present (your choice);
You could start with, "One could clearly see..."

or...

change "spoke" to "speak", and "used" to "use"

A subtle difference, but sounding better, either way. No?

Answer 5

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