(It's about a wife waiting for her husband to come back from war tho it speaks nothing of war)
'Till Then
As the form of light is turned to darkness
I lay still in hopes of freedom
I wish to be among the free world
With the life that used to be
But I know this will not soon happen to me
But still I pray for the day that this life, dream, and love speaks my name
'Till then I watch as the bright yellow sun falls into the night
And the nightly sky brings fort a full moon, that shines on my hopes
'Till then I live and pray for this life and love to return me to his arms as the days go on
2006-11-28 13:06:21 · 14 answers · asked by NOoneKNOWSwhy 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
Beautiful, inspirational, heartfelt. Keep on rhyming!
2006-11-28 13:10:29 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes I love it. It sounds like it was written by an expert. Keep on writing.
2006-11-28 21:44:29 · answer #2 · answered by Jay 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I sounds pretty darn good to me.
Poetry now a days doesn't always rhyme, it is called free verse. This is a good sample of that.
And James C, God bless you and please return safely. Love, Juanita
2006-11-28 21:08:58 · answer #3 · answered by nevada nomad 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The point is that you like it.... does not matter if others do... this is your self expression. However, on a critical note... you should check into poetry structure and poetry form.
But it your expression and that is what counts.
2006-11-28 21:17:19 · answer #4 · answered by Dragonlord Warlock 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, I don't like it, because I wouldn't wait for my husband to come back, I would let everyone hit it.
I'd keep it open like a 24-hour fastfood joint.
2006-11-28 21:08:28 · answer #5 · answered by Hol. 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nice free verse. Eh, I like it okay. Good job!
2006-11-28 21:08:59 · answer #6 · answered by Benjamin B 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it was awsome. and poetry really doesnt have to rhyme.
no offence, but elementary kids are really the only ones who think that >.<
no offence to them either :P as i am only in 8th grade :D
wow i like smilies today...
2006-11-28 21:57:14 · answer #7 · answered by Marissa 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
tell you what. If he doesn't like it or appreciate it, then u can send it to me in January when I go over there to replace the one coming home to you
2006-11-28 21:09:37 · answer #8 · answered by James C 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
yes =p
2006-11-28 21:15:11 · answer #9 · answered by sebas g 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was really great all those people who left negative commets are just plan stuped
2006-11-28 21:11:24 · answer #10 · answered by ***** K K ***** 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋