I'm writing an english paper on my fondest memory and i need to make it two pages.?

Question

A lot of people have memories in their life. My fondest memory I had was my senior year. I went to Bishop DuBourg High school all four years. I graduated in 2005. I have three fondest memory of my senior year. I went to state for soccer, my senior service project, and project graduation.
The first, memory I had was that our team were runner up for state championship game. It been years that are girl soccer team ever made it to state. I was excited because nobody thought we could make it that far. Our coach was so proud of us for making that far. It was a bit disappointing not winning but we worked very hard on getting there. Also, we have a plaque with all of our names on the wall of the gym.
My second, memory was my senior service project. Some people would be like “Why would you want to do a senior service project?” I had to chose a place to volunteer for two to three weeks because I needed about 72 hours before graduation. I chose Bethesda nursing home to volunteer because my sister-in-law works there and the elderly people needed someone to talk to. I would help out with activity, exercise, and I would take them to therapy. Also, I would talk and listen to them. I had a lot of fun. When I have time, once in a while I come back and visit them.
The third memory I had was project graduation. Most of the class of 2005 went to Concord Sport for project graduation. It was a lock in all night till 6 am. I had different choices to choose from. There were two indoor soccer field, two volleyball courts, basketball court, a swimming pool, a character drawing, and a hypnotist came later on that night. I got to see all my friends again before they went our separate ways.
In conclusion, I thought senior was the best because a lot happen, it was our last year. It went by so fast. It was a lot of fun. I will always remember senior year.

Answer 1

I assume you're looking for ways to make it longer. I suggest instead you cut it shorter and start building from there. The paper is supposed to be on your fondest MEMORY, not MEMORIES. Pick one (I'd use the senior service project) and embellish it. Add details. For example, explain what the purpose is of a senior service project (so what if everyone already knows). Tell how you felt on your way to the nursing home the first time. What were you thinking? Then describe the nursing home - what it looks like, how it made you feel, even what it smells like. Talk about the elderly people you met. Did they have any stories that you remember in particular? Choose two or three people that were especially memorable and describe them in detail - what they looked like, sounded like, if they had any physical challenges, how they faced those challenges. What did you talk about with them? Did they like to hear about your activities, or did they mostly want to talk about their own families and memories? What kind of therapy did they have? Describe the process, how it made them feel, if they said. Tell how you felt when the project ended. Did your opinion change after the experience?

The details are what make the paper interesting.

Answer 2

If you're writing about the history, you could try to add something interesting about the future of the game. Like that some people want goal-line technology to be added after all the mistakes made at the World Cup. Mention competitions, countries where soccer is the national sport, countries which DON'T have a national team (since more countries do than don't). Basically imagine that we're aliens and we don't know ANYTHING about soccer. Tell EVERYTHING.

Answer 3

My fondest memory is my senior year. I went to Bishop DuBourg High school in *insert town name* for all four years. I hade many friends that also attended Bishop DuBourg with me. I was in the graduating class of 2005. There are three specific memories I have of my wonderful senior year. The first was when I went to the state championshop for soccer. Also, I remember my senior service project, which was assisting the elderly at a nursing home. Lastly, I recall and project graduation.
The first memory I had was that our team was runner up for the state championship game in *insert state*. It had been years since our school's girls soccer team ever made it to the state championship. I was excited because nobody thought we could make it that far, and our coach was extremely proud. It was a bit disappointing not winning, but we worked very hard to get there. Nonetheless, we won second place! Also, we have a plaque with all of our names on the wall of our school gym.
My second memory was my senior service project. Some people would ask “Why would you want to do a senior service project?” I had to chose a place to volunteer for two to three weeks, due to the fact that I needed about seventy-two hours of community service before graduation. In the end,I chose Bethesda Nursing Home in *town name* to volunteer, because my sister-in-law works there and the elderly people needed someone to talk to. I would help out with their activities and exercises. I would even take them to therapy. Also, we would have interesting conversations with each other. It was a lot of fun volunteering at the Bethesda Nursing Home. Still to this day I go back and visit when I have time.
The third memory I had was project graduation. Most of the class of 2005 went to Concord Sport for project graduation. It was a lock in all night till 6 am. I had different choices to choose from. There were two indoor soccer field, two volleyball courts, basketball court, a swimming pool, a character drawing, and a hypnotist came later on that night. I got to see all my friends again before they went our separate ways.
In conclusion, I thought my senior was the best because so much happenned, it was our final year of high school. It went by so quickly. It was tons of fun. I will always remember senior year.

I didn't edit your third memory paragraph... WOW!!!! Seriously, you made bad mistakes with your grammar! I'm in ninth grade and I know never to use "a lot", or to say "and people would be like 'what are you doing...'"
Yeah... Good luck...
Be more descriptive!!!!!!! Yeah, you need to add more details! Do you remember anyone at the nursing home? What kind of exercises and activities did they do? And your team! Who was on it? How good were you? What position did you play? What number were you? Your sentences aren't complex enough!

Answer 4

everything you wrote was great. Now you just need to go back and "flesh it out". Tell us more about how not winning felt. Tell me more about project graduation. When was it? Where was it? elaborate on everything you have said and you will have 2 two pages in no time. And you don't need to use words like first second and third and in conclusion. If you think of different ways to make a transition, the paper will be more polished. Your off to a good start. Go back and add details to the general structure you have laid out.

Answer 5

Add an introduction. Something that will capture the readers attention. Example:
Lockers, friends laughing during passing periods, lunches in the cafeteria, prom, homecoming; there are certain moments that remain in everyone’s memory from their high school experience. The moments that will remain in my life for years to come stem from my senior year. I attended Bishop DuBourg High School graduating in 2005. Though there are many moments that made the year special, three particularly fond memories stand out in my mind: competing in the to state soccer match, my senior service project, and project graduation.
The first, memory from my senior year was that our team was runner up for the state championship game. It had been years since our girls’ soccer team had been successful enough to make it to state. I was excited because nobody thought we could make it that far. Our coach was so proud of us for our accomplishment. It was a bit disappointing not winning but we worked very hard to compete at that level. Also, we have a plaque with all of our names on the wall of the gym. Add more description about what the game was like. Where was it? Was it early in the morning? Did the team all ride together, what was the bus trip like? What was the game itself like? Were you nervous? What happen after? Did the school do anything special for the team before or after the game?
My second, memory is my senior service project. Some people would say things such as, “Why would you want to do a senior service project?” I had to choose a place to volunteer for two to three weeks because I needed approximately 72 hours before graduation. (Why did you need the hours? Was it a requirement to graduate?)I chose Bethesda nursing home to volunteer because my sister-in-law works there and I thought it would be nice if there was someone the with which the elderly people could talk.. I would help out with activities, exercise, and I would take them to therapy. Also, I would talk and listen to them. I had a lot of fun. When I have time, once in a while I come back and visit them. (Talk about someone in particular that stands out in your mind. Or a particular day that was special, was there a holiday or anything while you were there? Was there a particular activity you participated in with them that stands out to you? For example, maybe you read a letter to one of them, or maybe you helped one get ready for their family to visit).
The third memory I cherish from my senior year is project graduation. Most of the class of 2005 went to Concord Sport for project graduation. It was a lock-in all night until 6 am. I had different choices to choose from. There were two indoor soccer field, two volleyball courts, basketball court, a swimming pool, a character drawing, and a hypnotist came later on that night. I got to see all my friends again before they went our separate ways. (Be more specific. Were you hypnotized? did you get your picture drawn? What made the night so special?)
My senior year taught me a lot. Not just about reading, writing, and mathematics, but also about the thrill of competition, the joy of volunteering, and the appreciation for people in your life. I know there are many more memories that will stand out to me as the years go on, but my senior year will always hold a special place in my mind.