"Homeless" song what do you think?

Question

I saw a woman and a child walking down the road
I said hey lady do you need a ride
She said we've got no place left to go
I saw a man out on the streets
And he was wrenching his bottle
He said if you cant make it to the top
What have you to lose when you hit the bottom?
Ah thats just a part of my american dream
wrapped up rolling down and comming over
Life in america is not what it seems
But thats just the grand illusion
The story breaks and the press retakes it
And the truth is just like fiction
And in a crazy world of war
We wage our sins in a lost and forgotten benediction
Yes I still love you
After all these years
And I still think of you
Between the beers
The day is over and the job is done
The stress of working is comming undone
As two lovers make love
They reflect the setting of the sun
Taking place a thousand miles away
In another time another place and another day.....
JE Bressman@94

Answer 1

Thats amazing is it finished? I love every word in it and it seems like this day and age thats whats going on and it took one person to write it get the rite people and you may get signed on somewhere nd make $$$ honey, keep up the good job.

Answer 2

beautiful! I think a male and female harmonizing with those words would sound lovely!Keep writing more songs