A lonely child
A field of blue
The tears that flow
The heart that bleeds
But no one cares
Now I write
The hidden truth
State of humanity
Does one care
Or need to care
No we don’t
That’s what most say
But that’s not true
And I write
To open eyes
And show the truth
2006-11-27 00:20:56 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
hey! My parents didn't abuse me, kay? Maybe I'm dark for some other reason, but stay away from my parents!
2006-11-27 00:41:08 · update #1
It is a dark poem, but definitely has a ring of truth to it.
The difficulty is the end. There is hope at the end but no explanation of why that hope exists. The poem says that people say they do not care, but that is a lie. It does not say why it is a lie. It does not mention that under that tough exterior that society sometimes expects most people have a heart.
Take care,
Troy
2006-11-27 01:12:11 · answer #1 · answered by tiuliucci 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I don’t know where poetry comes from, but I do know that in every person exists a hint of darkness, a spark of light, and all shades in between. I don’t see this as being a completely dark poem about loss and loneliness. I like that the poet sees that, though she feels alone at that moment, and that she hurts to the point of tears at that moment, the world is not all cruel and vindictive. People care about each other, and people even need to care for on another.
I like this poem: it shows the pain and loneliness that we all feel at times, and gives hope to move past the pain.
2006-11-27 04:46:39 · answer #2 · answered by Maddog Salamander 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's got a dark shade to it, but I love it. I write a lot of those kinda poems. If you want, you can have a look at them at http://www.mysticalangel.4t.com
Write me at yvonne_mystic@yahoo.com and lemme know what you think. Thanks!
2006-11-27 01:35:58 · answer #3 · answered by Yvonne Mystic 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well you asked what people thought, you got some answers, if you do that you had better be thicker skinned.
2006-11-27 03:31:54 · answer #4 · answered by June smiles 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's good. I liked it because it makes sense and it does express what you felt while writing this poem.
I also write poems. Please read my poem and let me know if you have any suggestions.
Keep writing. Cheers:)
2006-11-27 02:29:27 · answer #5 · answered by ricci 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with Dan
2006-11-27 00:34:33 · answer #6 · answered by cedricgurl 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
I LIKE POETRY THAT HAS A HAPPY ENDING. A YES I SHOULD, NOT A NO YOU SHOULDENT. DID YOUR PARENTS ABUSE YOU OR SOMETHING YOUR SO DARK AND TWISTED.
2006-11-27 00:26:24 · answer #7 · answered by Dan F 1 · 0⤊ 4⤋