as of a student neglect her studies.
2006-11-26 22:50:38 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Deterioration, lack of progress, degeneration...any of these any help?
2006-11-26 22:53:52 · answer #1 · answered by lou b 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Im going to Analise this as I read and each number if for each paragraph: 1. scrape this and put it at the end, you don't want to tell the reader that something bad will happen at the beginning of the piece, it should be a surprise. Also don't need to be so specific on the date, don't even need a date at all! 2. I'm guessing your at a concert so 'polluting' wouldn't be the right word for the light from the stage... 'and to finally arrive was the biggest relief I'd ever felt' - this is a bad way to put it for GCSE, seems slightly childish, you should see if you could rewrite it - so when I finally arrived I was ecstatic with joy or longing to escape the cramped car... 3. You should use colloquial (not how it's spelt I know) language for speech to make it seem more realistic, although mother and I is correct english, no one speaks like in real life. 4. Also you could use ' in order to show your mumbling, go and 'elp pu the tent up before dad get' angry (slightly chavy so don't copy this straight) Again why does he have an accent pronounce you don't? would be good if you could show two different accents 8. 'hibernate' isn't the write verb here, because he's not going to sleep on winter :P I like the story, although I didn't at first realise you hated the ffestival It's nice how it improves when you see the boy, although its rather cliche for me. Also try and find some intesterting langague, for my GCSE coursework I ended up putting every verb into a thesaurus but it got me full marks! Also it's is quite long already so you should think of ending it soon... GOOD LUCK! (if you want any more suggestions email me with the finished thing)
2016-05-23 08:52:39 · answer #2 · answered by Mary 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Degradation or degrade: "Because the student neglected her studies for several months, her scholastic abilities degraded badly."
2006-11-26 22:52:37 · answer #3 · answered by Rusting 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Degrading
2006-11-26 22:52:01 · answer #4 · answered by Claude 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Declination, deterioration.
2006-11-26 22:52:47 · answer #5 · answered by salstick 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a student regresses her interests in studying
2006-11-26 22:55:02 · answer #6 · answered by 2D1iLuV 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A good atonym I'd use is 'deterioration', or 'decline'
2006-11-26 22:54:16 · answer #7 · answered by richard 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
deteriorate, degenerate, go down hill, disentegrate, reduce.
2006-11-26 22:53:54 · answer #8 · answered by haute couture 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
falling by the wayside
2006-11-26 22:59:18 · answer #9 · answered by rhonda3826 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
deterioration
2006-11-26 22:52:30 · answer #10 · answered by The Proof Is In The Pudding 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋