How can I make this sound better?

Question

This is a fake article ive written, how can i make it better or what can i add:

In a recent courtroom drama, accused murderer Jack Merridew was almost attacked by fellow defendant Ralph Grant following his statement in the investigation surrounding the deaths on the island. Both boys are not in custody.
A courtroom environment that had begun in silence erupted into a flurry of activity when Mr. Merridew provided details into the deaths of some of the boys which provoked an outburst by Mr. Grant. He got up from his seating screaming, “You’re such a liar!” His lawyer, Will Hayden, tried to calm him down. Mr. Grant flew out of his chair in a rage and could hardly be stopped. Running to the stand, intending to attack Mr. Merridew but being restrained by the police in time.

Answer 1

In a recent courtroom drama, accused murderer Jack Merridew was almost attacked by fellow defendant Ralph Grant following his statement in the investigation surrounding the deaths on the island. (Nether) boys are in custody.

(the) courtroom environment that had begun in silence erupted into a flurry of activity when Mr. Merridew provided details into the deaths of some of the boys which provoked an outburst by Mr. Grant. He got up from his seating screaming, “You’re such a liar!” His lawyer, Will Hayden, tried to calm him down. Mr. Grant flew out of his chair in a rage and could hardly be stopped. Running to the stand, intending to attack Mr. Merridew but being restrained by the police in time.

sounds great to me! A worthy =)

Answer 2

I put some corrections in () for you to consider. Hope this helps a little!


In a recent courtroom drama, accused murderer Jack Merridew was almost attacked by fellow defendant Ralph Grant following his statement in the investigation surrounding the deaths on the island. Both (NEITHER) boys are not(delete not) in custody.
A courtroom environment(use a word to describe the people in the courtroom rather than the environment, perhaps?) that had begun in silence erupted into a flurry of activity when Mr. Merridew provided details into the deaths of some of the boys(should the case be described in brief detail before this point, readers have no idea what you are talking about right now...) which provoked an outburst by Mr. Grant. He got up (leaped) from his seating screaming, “You’re such a liar!” His lawyer, Will Hayden, tried to calm him down. Mr. Grant flew out of his chair in a rage and could hardly be stopped. (you are missing a subject to this sentence)Running to the stand, intending to attack Mr. Merridew but was restrained by the police in time (to prevent injury).

Answer 3

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grant,
after
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mr grant,
Mr merridew macy melly ((something))
last wrod--/