how can i make this sound better?

Question

This is a make up news articles, please tell me how i can make it better and examples would be nice.

Three days ago in the court room Ralf Grant attacked Jack Merridew. Grant seemed to be outraged at Merridew and what he was saying, and lashed out on him. Now both of the boys are under custody.
The courtroom started out a hush. There was a murder trial going on and no one could believe what was being said. Jack was asked what had happened on the island. He started to explain how some of the boys on the island died. Suddenly Ralph gets up and screams “You’re such a liar!” His lawyer tried to calm him down. Ralph flied out of his chair in a rage and could barely be stopped. He ran up to the stand almost attacking Jack Merridew but luckily the police restrained him in time.

or what could i add? anything really though cuz its made up

just not something that couldnt possibly happen

Answer 1

i added some changes right in the text hope they help!


Three days ago in the court room Ralf Grant attacked Jack Merridew during a murder trial. Grant seemed to be outraged at Merridew and what he was saying, and lashed out on him. Now both of the boys are in custody.

The courtroom was deathly quiet, you could hear a pen drop. No one could believe what was being said in the trial (add why). Jack was asked what had happened on the island. He started to explain how some of the boys on the island died. (Maybe add a quote) Suddenly Ralph gets up and screamed “You’re such a liar!” His lawyer, (enter name), tried to calm him down. Ralph flew out of his chair in a rage and could barely be stopped by police. He ran up to the stand almost got to Jack Merridew. His intent was to attack Merridew but luckily the police restrained him in time
good luck! Hope you get an A

Answer 2

Chicago, Il. Nov. 27, 2006
An unprovoked attack by Ralf Grant in District Court three days ago made the Island Murder case even more spectacular. Jack Merridew, on the witness stand for the first time, was explaining to the hushed courtroom how some of the boys died. Without provocation, Grant stood up, wrestled with his lawyers and screamed "You're such a liar!".
Jumping from his seat, Grant ran to the witness stand to attack Merridew. The security officers were able to restrain Grant, who was warned by the judge. Both men are in custody until the resolution of the case.

Answer 3

In the courtroom on Friday, Ralf Grant attacked Jack Merridew. Grant was outraged, lashing out at Merridew and his comments. Now both boys are in custody.

Initially, the courtroom was silent. No one could believe what they were hearing during the murder trial. A lawyer asked Jack what happened on the island. Jack started to explain what caused some of the boys on the island to die. Suddenly, Ralph got up and screamed, “You’re such a liar!”

Ralph's lawyer tried to calm him down. The boy flew out of his chair in a rage and could barely be stopped. He ran up to the stand, and he would have been successful in attacking Jack Merridew if the police hadn't restrained him just in time.

Answer 4

You could make these changes:
Three days ago in the court room, Ralf Grant attacked Jack Merridew. Grant seemed to be outraged at what Merridew was saying, so he lashed out on him. Now, both Merridew and Grant are under custody.
The courtroom started out a hush. There was a murder trial going on and no one could believe what was being said. Jack was asked what had happened on the island. He started to explain how some of the boys on the island died. Suddenly Ralph got up and screamed, “You’re such a liar!” His lawyer tried to calm him down. Ralph fled out of his chair in a rage and could not be stopped. He ran up to the stand, almost attacking Jack Merridew. However, the police luckily restrained him in time.