What are your views on this poem? Honesty appreciated.?

Question

Opinions please.
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I’m searching in the past to find some truth about the future
I’m holding out the papers now to spread the lies and rumours
I saw a headline screaming out about some form of justice
The pictures bled with stony eyes preceding an old auspice

I’m listening to the voices that come crawling to my ears
They me told they are much worse off, they tell me all their fears
Faltered through a ragged fence, I heed the token call
But slip and slide, I take this ride, I rise and then I fall

Another face in God’s Green Earth, is all you are to me
But once was golden, timid, cute, is nowhere to be seen
Alas, all I think and all I care was patented by you
So take these lies that slip my mind and turn them into truths

So farewell dearest friend of mine, the time has come to leave
But worry not about the end, please leave all that for me
I’ll slay the demons that come for you and burn them at the stake
I’ll gaze into that hateful mirror and see what I can take

Answer 1

I am not an 'expert' on poetry but then, who is? Poetry is a very personal thing.
As far as your poem goes, I think it is well formed and obviously well thought out. It seems to describe what a lot of people feel in this day and age, in that we can all take something from previous experiences and it is up to us whether that is positive or negative for us and the others involved.
I am sure that someone else will see this poem completely differently from me but even if you get negative comments do not let that dissuade you from carrying on writing.

Answer 2

fourtrh line seems to lose its meter, while i read.
dont ask me to interpret what you mean. but i do like the opening statement that seems to describe religious past and modern beliefs being connected.
voices can mean mental illness but it also has significance with the many people who teach so many things. NOT of the voices can be true.
Truth is obtained line by line and precept by precept through study and prayer. Not heard through rumors and lies of course.
if a face is what you remember and it was cute and this person was good at one time, know that all flesh dwindles in glory of beauty. did you break up with a girl? or are you asking to die.
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if you think you can fight demons and not be guilty of murder for burning people at the stake, where demons are most like spirit and cannot be burned but they can be locked up!

Answer 3

the poem its good the style its good (free style=no rimes) but i think that somehow you need to link the stances with some transition words because people might think thar are four differen poems. run a spell check and youll have a nice touching poem

ps, try not to put a poem in a sonnet style because people woulf get confused

Answer 4

Firstly I think that it was cruel for one of the answers to mention about doctors and meds. If you cannot say anything nice, don't say anything.

The poem is from a genuine person putting his thoughts on paper and sharing his feelings. I liked it. Keep writing.

Answer 5

Alittle weird although I liked the 1st part, after you get to the last two paragraphs, it gets somewhat confusing..Hell keep it up artists are usually a little odd anyway.

Answer 6

Did you write this? Aweome yet so sad It sounds like an Emily Dickinson poem

Answer 7

It's a very touching poem. All a poem is supposed to be. It reminds me of a friend of mine who might be thinking the same as you are...

Answer 8

if you made this, you're one undiscovered talent but i agree with U B Happy, if interpreted it's kind of scary and morbid..like after all you discovered pained you and now to make all the hurtings go away, you will leave...i do hope it's just a figure of speech my friend...

Answer 9

You need to have the doctor check your meds. I hope this isn't a suicide note, I couldn't tell.

Answer 10

Interesting and deep.