will u correct my poor English sentences?

Question

There is the other reason besides technical reason. That's the lack of emotional feelings. People are being selfish and egoist.Decreasing of child birth shows us the fact which we are busy ourselves about seeking a way to make living rather than find humanistic side. We easily can contact murder case which attemp coverage of insurance, and the egoism drives a society to groomly place. We can study from home in the future even though we do not go to school and can work without moving, and this is reflected to a developed society. As it does now, computers will interchange everything, and if computers will be discontinued or destroied, human beings will be faced severe obstacle .
People will not able to work without computer, and we are volunteering a computer's slave. Perhaps, the story of the Terminator can come true. I highly wonder if we see the world and say world is developing. Human beings feel loneliness among the people. these facts are going to destroy the earth.

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Answer 1

There is another reason besides(a) technical one. It is the lack of emotional feelings. People are being selfish and egotistical. A decreasing birth rate points to the fact that we are busy seeking ways of making a living rather than indulging our biological urges. {{{{We easily can contact murder case which attemp coverage of insurance, and the egoism drives a society to groomly place.}}} THIS PART WITHIN THE PARENTHESES MAKES ABSOLUTELY NO SENSE!!!! We can study from home in the future even though we do not go to school(In the future, we can attend school at home and not find it necessary to be physically present at a campus). (Additionally, we may also be able to work at home dispensing with the problems of commuting). These are reflected by a developing society. Presently, computers interchange everything.If the use of computers were to be discontinued or somehow destroyed, civilization would face unimaginable obstacles.
People will not be able to work without computers and it appears that we are actually slaves to "the machine". Perhaps, the movie "Terminator" can become a reality, much like the gadgets depicted in the old Dick Tracey cartoon strip eventually came into being. I truly wonder if, when we study today's civilizations, we can say the world is developing. At least developing in a positive way, a way that is conducive to the furtherment of the good of humanity. Despite all of our advances, humans still experience all of the negative phychological aspects of life. They still feel loneliness even when among large groups of people.( these facts are going to destroy the earth. ) this last sentence is unnecessary

Answer 2

There are other reasons besides technical reasons and that is the lack of emotional feelings. People are being selfish and egoistic. Decreasing of child births shows us the fact that we are already too busy ourselves about seeking a way to make a living rather than finding a humanistic side. We can easily contact murder cases which will attempt coverage of insurance. The egoism drives society to a gloomy place. So to avoid that we can study from our homes in the future even though we may not go to school. This will enable us to work without moving, and this will be reflected as a developed society.

As it does now, computers will interchange everything, and if computers become discontinued or destroyed, human beings will face a severe obstacle. People will not be able to work without computers, and we are volunteering computers as being a slave to us. Perhaps, the movie "Terminator" can actually come true. I highly wonder if we can see the world and say that it is developing. These facts are going to destroy the earth one day.


I have a question though, how are you going to know which one to follow out of all of us who corrected this for you? hmmm

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Answer 3

Will u correct my poor English sentences?
There is another reason besides the technical reason. That's the lack of emotion. People are selfish and egotistical.Decreasing birth rate shows us the fact that we are busy, seeking a way to make a living rather than find a humanistic side. (this sentence made no sense) We will be able to study from home in the future, even though we do not go to school and can work without moving, and this will be reflected in a developed society. As it does now, computers will change everything, and if computers were to cease working, human beings would faced severe obstacles .
People can't work without computers, and we are voluntary slaves to computers. Perhaps, the story of the Terminator can come true. I wonder if we see the world and say the world is developing. Today, people feel lonely in a crowd.

Answer 4

There are, in addition to strictly technological considerations, fears that we risk becoming emotionally disconnected. People can be selfish and egocentric. The declining birthrate in developed countries might reflect our society's growing preoccupation with pursuing careers and materialism at the expense of our more humanistic qualities. [Note - I disagree with the inclusion of the murder for insurance example - there are examples of murder for profit since time immemorial, it isn't a byproduct of the technological age. I would think more of spamming and identity theft as being new sociological examples of people's selfish exploitation of other people]. Our dependence on computers will only become greater as we see ourselves not only studying from home but increasingly working from home also. [Note - a remark about social isolation...lack of regular face to face human interaction...might be useful here. Human qualities like empathy are best developed face to face, and it's not pleasant to imagine a society without empathy].
This level of dependence on computers might be seen as slavery to the machine, as much as we prefer to think they are serving us. Perhaps the story of the Terminator is not one of an entirely implausible future. Can we truly say our society is developing if it is developing into a society of interconnected computers instead of a society of interconnected people?
The world is smaller, yet in many ways lonelier. [Note - I'm not sure I'd talk about the earth's destruction... maybe just say the earth we know is in danger, or something like that. Sorry about the fairly extreme editing!]

Answer 5

There are other reasons besides techical reasons. put a comma betweenegoist and decreasing cases which attempt As it does, now computers will interchange everything ;if computers will be discontinued or destroyed human beings will face severe obstacles. computers take highly out , after world these needs to be cap These facts are destroying the earth.

Answer 6

Corrected sentences: very nearly anybody have confidence that the worldwide is coming up constantly and regard it a certainty, my opinion concerning that actuality is distinctive. it particularly is impossible to choose no rely if the worldwide is coming up or degenerating. i think of the worldwide could be degenerating. There are 2 motives with reference to the assumption which i think of the worldwide is consistently degenerating. first of all, we could think of what 'enhance' potential. "enhance: to enhance or enhance into something bigger or extra progressed". What does an improve mean? does not an improve mean going front to solid-for-leaving? Is our society going to the extra effective worldwide? regrettably, i do no longer think of so. between the motives why do i think of like it particularly is predicated on the assumption if our society is going on like this, our society is going to be degenerated. hundreds style of untamed animals have disappeared consistent with a three hundred and sixty 5 days, and environment is progressively extra polluted, the Amazon which provides numerous oxygen is particularly destroyed. Seeing this occasion, i will't consider that society is coming up. solid job! The sentences weren't too undesirable!

Answer 7

Ur english is perfect.There is no need for correction and it is 100./. right

Answer 8

sorry i can't. i am not a teacher.

Answer 9

why dont you chage your question first.

Answer 10

HAHA!