never thought a kid could be a nerd and also be so cool. academacally reconized while he was in school. not a fool the girls reconized him as a tool; feeling blue the kid did not know what to do. But in a state of defeat the boy started hearing beats and the he started writing lyrics so that everyone could hear it. Well rounded he was and this was just because he was born to succeed; now everyone believed. And the girls were like what happened i thought that kid was a nerd little did they know he was soaring like a bird.
2006-11-25 12:54:00 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I like that,it is different and cool.
2006-11-25 16:34:09 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
nope
sorry. now i'll get all kinds of thumbs down and everything, but there's no point lying just to make you feel better.
you might go around thinking you're some great poet/rapper, and then get the sh*t beat out of you laying down so weak sh*t. but don't get discouraged. keep trying. try examining stuff that IS good, and try and understand what makes it good. that'll help you get better. sorry to get all pedantic there. good luck mr. cool nerd.
2006-11-25 20:59:20 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes it is a good one. Your a great writer
2006-11-25 21:42:55 · answer #3 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Keep writing, someday remember you got your first fans........here!
You know what might be fun for your and make you think of things you never thought of?
An Iambic Pentameter
Keep rockin!!!!!!!!!
2006-11-25 20:58:50 · answer #4 · answered by wildmedicsue 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Great,wonderful words couldn't even scribe it
2006-11-25 20:56:22 · answer #5 · answered by Vball Babe 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
No...talk to a really good poet that I know for tips...
(Not me,)
I. M. me and I can get him to talk to you!! :)
2006-11-25 20:58:15 · answer #6 · answered by coca_cola_froggy 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i love it... the ending is a bit weak, and i think it would be cooler if you didnt call him 'kid'
but it really is very good
2006-11-25 20:57:46 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
that's a beautiful poem and the story is clear. well done.
2006-11-25 20:56:52 · answer #8 · answered by Youngling 4 · 2⤊ 1⤋
awesome. two thumbs way up.
2006-11-25 21:01:54 · answer #9 · answered by jmdjslkrb 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
its ok, it needs to be "structured" differently though.
2006-11-25 20:57:39 · answer #10 · answered by leafy_c2i2 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋