Poem I wrote and is it good?

Question

It’s not too late for me

Love was written in the stars,
Not very long ago.
Made for young and even old,
We all want to reach for the stars, for one desperate tug.
Romance is a pleasant thing,
But not as important as companionship.
It makes you wonder and even sing,
Tags along your hip.
Hopefully there is still time,
For love to finally be.
I’ll take a ride along the stars,
Its not too late for me.

Answer 1

You have some obvious natural talent. I love the line, "Romance is a pleasant thing" -- great use of understatement!

A few suggestions:
1. Poems don't have to rhyme. This one shouldn't. It sounds forced and artificial for lines of different lengths to rhyme. ("Tags along your hip?" You wouldn't have written that unless you were desperate to make a rhyme.)
2. Use more active verbs (i.e., not "is," "are," etc.").
3. Avoid overusing words ("stars," for instance).
4. Hone your craft! Write every day, read as much poetry as you can get your hands on, take a class in creative writing, even buy a book on creative writing (I recommend "In the Palm of Your Hand" by Kowit).

Answer 2

Your a really good poet. Do you write for a living? You should and yours aren't boring and lame like some other poems. :)

Answer 3

I like it.

When you read it, you get a sense of the passion and emotion in this poem. It directly states your opinions, and the imagery is remarkable.

Answer 4

It's good. Great job! It takes me weeks to put together something like that.

Answer 5

Enough said...lol

Answer 6

Hey i think it's kinda cute.
Good on ya kid!

Answer 7

yes it's very good!

Answer 8

yes its really good!

Answer 9

i like it, very nice.