Grammar check~~about If I were...plez?

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Grammar and structure.

If I were Picasso, I could become a rich man, help paupers , and have more sense of beauty.

Because I could draw many masterpiece pictures, every time everyone would expect my new pieces. In addition, they would also want to collect them. Then I could earn a lot of money by selling them. Whenever I got money, I could donate my own money to help those who needed help indeed.

So if I were Picasso, I could not only become a rich man but also help the poor. Just as the proverb says, "To kill two birds with one stone."

Oh, the most important thing is that I want to have more sense of beauty. I don't have good sense of beauty, so I'm always afraid of art classes. If I were Picasso, undoubtedly arts classes wouldn't be always my nightmare. Maybe the teacher would be jealous of me because I could draw more beautiful pictures than she could. Haha!

Answer 1

Grammar check~~about If I were...plez?
Grammar and structure.

If I WAS Picasso, I WOULD become a rich man, help paupers (NO COMMA) and have A GREATER sense of beauty.

Everyone would ANTICIPATE my new pieces because I can draw masterpieces. They would also want to collect them and I would earn a lot of money by selling them. Whenever I RECEIVED money, I would donate it to those in need.

So if I WAS Picasso, I would not only become a rich man but also help the poor. As the SAYING GOES, "To kill two birds with one stone."

The most important thing is that I want to have more sense of beauty, which I lack; I'm afraid of art classes. If I WAS Picasso, arts classes would no longer be a nightmare. The teacher might be jealous of me because I would be able to draw more beautiful pictures than she.

Answer 2

If I was Picasso, I could become a rich man, help paupers and have a better sense of beauty.

Because of my ability to create masterful pictures, my new pieces would be in demand as collectibles. With the sales, I could amass large sums of money and help those in need.

If I was Picasso, then, I could not only become a rich man but also help the poor. Just as the proverb says, "To kill two birds with one stone."

The most important thing, however, would be my enhanced sens of beauty. As it is, I don't have good sense of beauty, so I'm always afraid of art classes. If I were Picasso, art classes would no longer be my nightmare. Perhaps the teacher would be envious, as I could draw more beautiful pictures than she could. Haha!

Answer 3

1. no comma after "if i were Picasso"
2. The sentence "Because I could draw many masterpiece pictures, every time everyone would expect my new pieces." would make more sense if you said "Because I could draw many masterpiece pictures, everyone would expect my new pieces all the time.
3. Dont start your sentence with "Oh"
4. where it says "classes wouldn't be always my nightmare", switch the words be and always.

Great writing! hope this helped

Answer 4

What was the question? Ah the "If I were. . ." That is the correct usage of the word. Well done.