could i have some feedback on these new poems?

Question

Sami’s Memory

A memento of her memory
transformed to coldness to convey
all the warmth in the world
tenderness that will forever stay

The innocent scent of first love
Places in five cities forever still
As though our spirits play in time
In the divinity of free will

My head against her heart
silences the singing sands
Gives her a chance to build inside
a world where we will forever dance

the first scent will be the last
white envelope of new perception
to my daily Christening
In the warm water reception

the poetry in me still harvested
from a soul planted in the earth
of a time when all is forgiven
in the miracle of rebirth

Grayness

Feelings innate and unexplainable
Fall in the rain, an unwelcome gift
Making the world an unbearable gray
I always thought I would celebrate
Now, the ambiguity of gesture
marked by the innocence of her gaze
My fuzzy eyes seeking hope in the haze
longing for the rebirth of the rainbow
For strangers could be anything
From saviors to Satans
When the forever fog lifts
over the oceans of coveted sleep,
Will unquestioned trust and unrequited love
Be given so unabashedly?
Yes.


Pregnant

Impregnate me with the seed of inspiration
Wild flowers that wilt in my womb
could be anything if you’d allow
become fertile pieces of denial
My fingers give a bitter lonely birth
Of never knowing human touch
Renounce our offspring as mine alone
Loveless love children I long to give your name.

Answer 1

the last one was real weird. i think you should cultivate the stranger type stuff. its different. your own.

Answer 2

Awesome if u ask me. I really loved Sami's memory.

Answer 3

Those poems were awesome. They were so descriptive with detail!!