please can anyone look at this essay on Lord of the Flies and tell me your oppinion? i am an ESL student.?

Question

Fear is one of the most powerful emotions that control the way any human being acts in certain circumstances. In the novel, Lord of the Flies, written by William Golding, the boys show fear in many things. They see and hear assorted things on the island and assume them to be beasts. As the novel progresses, the boys’ fear of the unknown beast also become exceedingly powerful and their attitudes towards it become increasingly irrational. The terror completely paralyzes their minds, leaving them too weak to find out the truth about their fear. Fear contributes to human beings’ instability and ultimately their irrational actions. The beast in the novel symbolizes the fear flying around on the island. Fear is evident in all the boys, from the nightmares to the belief in the existence of a beast. The boys’ fear of the beast becomes an increasingly important aspect of their lives, from the moment the first littlun claims to have seen snake-monster in Chapter 2. Not only was this unknown beast frightening the littluns, also the hunters started to have nightmares. In chapter five, Jack addressing Ralph says:You said they dream and cry out. Now they talk not only the littluns, but also my hunters sometimes talk of a thing, a dark thing, a beast, some sort of animal (Golding pg. 83).The fact that all the boys are younger than thirteen on the island greatly affects the amount of fear controlling them. Their cries at night prove that fear has overcome their minds. Just as all fear, danger, and suffering they experience in their nightmares comes from not realizing that they are only dreaming. Fear is the only barrier making them do irrational things, which they would not do in a secure place. Further, in the same chapter, a little boy named Phil, dreams of weird animals. He describes his dream, saying, “And I was frightened… and then I saw something moving among the trees, something big and horrid” (Pg. 85). The truth is he sees Simon in the dark, but his mind was so obsessed with thoughts of “beasties” that it refused to see the reality. As a matter of fact, Imagination and fear takes place in the illusory description of the beast, which the twins, Samneric describe.There were eyes
Teeth
Claws
The beast followed us
Nearly touched me (Pg. 100)
Genuinely, the twins see a dead parachutist. Fear of the beast totally conquers their minds, making their brains too weak to think straight. Their imaginations are so strong and wild that they fail to conquer their fear of the beast.Fear follows crime. The example of this is evident in the novel, when Simon had come stumbling out of the dark forest while the boys were dancing a victory dance and everyone surrounded him. They chanted, "Kill the beast! Cut his throat! Spill his blood!" (Pg. 152) they believed him to be the beast and one after another, they started poking at him with their spears until they were convinced that the “Beast” is dead. The boys were so much threatened by the fear that they were ready to do anything. For them the peace and freedom from fear would be only gained if the beast was dead. The hunters, in fear, savagely, murder an innocent child and Fear was the motivation behind their irrational crime. Nevertheless, not all the boys on the island are too much affected by this fear. As an illustration, Piggy takes a scientific approach, which is more rational. “Life is scientific…I know there isn’t no beast…but I know there isn’t no fear either” (Pg. 84) this quotation from chapter five demonstrates that Piggy is not even slightly worried about the beast. He does not allow fear to control him; instead, he bosses his fear with calm and rational thinking. Similarly, Jack is absolutely carefree about the beast. He knows that there is no beast on the island. During one of the assemblies jack says, “Well then I’ve been all over this island. By myself. If there were beast, I’d have seen it. Be frightened because you’re like that-but there is no beast in the forest” (Pg. 83). It is quite clear, from the assembly in chapter five, that jack does not fear the beast. He tries to tell the littleuns that there is no beast, but the littleuns are so much affected by the fear that they are afraid to do anything. Jack is confident that there is no beast and therefore he does not have to fear or worry about anything.There is nothing to fear except the persistent refusal to find out the truth and to analyze the causes of happening. In similar way, the boys In Lord of the flies do not seem to realize the truth that there is no beast, but it is rather a sinful nature within each one of them. Simon is the only child, who is calm, has the courage to confront the beast and subsequently find out the truth that, “'Maybe there is a beast.... Maybe it's only us." Golding sheds light on fear inside human being and how the beast is not a physical thing, but the big horrid “Beast of Fear,” with claws, eyes, and teeth is hidden deep inside human beings, but they wholeheartedly ignore this reality, which results into chaos and irrational actions. However, Ralph and piggy take a more logical action, During their assembly, when the topic of fear is brought up Ralph boldly says, The thing is Fear can't hurt you any more than a dream. There aren't any beasts to be afraid of on this island.... Serve you right if something did get you, you useless lot of cry-babies!" (Pg. 82).
Ralph is too bothered trying to convince others that there is nothing to be afraid of on this island, but he has strongly convinced himself that there is no beast and understands the fact that fear is harmless. In a similar way, Piggy also takes a very interesting and sensible approach to this matter. “Life...is scientific.... I know there isn't no beast...but I know there isn't no fear, either...."(Pg. 84). This quote clearly reveals that Piggy’s is very lighthearted about fear, as he does not let fear to consume him in anyway rather he fights back his fear with his knowledge. Fear in Lord of the Flies plays a very prominent role, from the beginning until the end of this provocative story. The boys’ on the island suffer and struggle to feel safe. What they do not understand is that is that all their fears came from their own uncontrolled minds and delusions. Their delirious minds, made up a horrid beast and through out the story they kept doing, unwise and foolish things. But nobody made any effort to understand the reality. The island, on which they were all living, did not exist separately from their minds. Their conviction that things exist "out there", independent of their minds, was the source of all fear. They do not see directly that everything is projected by their perceiving awareness. Therefore, it resulted into a massive panic, irrationality and ultimately instability.

Answer 1

[For whatever it's worth, I’ve tried recasting it, trying my best not to change the way you wanted to say what you wanted to say, relocating some of your ideas for a more unified presentation, better impact, all the while remaining consistent with your preference for the present tense. The paragraph breakdowns are more for consistency, flow and visual impact. Please verify your quotes; make sure they're verbatim and punctuated as they are in the book. Here goes:]

Fear is one of the most powerful emotions that control the way a human being acts in certain circumstances. It contributes to one’s instability and, ultimately, to irrationality.

William Golding’s “Lord of the Flies” is all about fear and its irrational consequences. It sheds light on that kind of fear that may not be of something physical at all. It is the irrational fear of fear itself, the big horrid “Beast of Fear” with claws, eyes, and teeth lurking inside us. It is the fear we prefer to ignore. In “Lord of the Flies,” it is the fear which leads to irrational acts.

In “Lord of the Flies,” the boys fear almost everything they see and hear on the island, assuming them to be beasts. As the novel progresses, their fear of the unknown beast becomes exceedingly powerful their attitudes towards it become increasingly irrational. Terror paralyzes their minds, leaving them too weak to face the truth about their fears.

The beast in the novel symbolizes fear flying around on the island. Fear is evident in all the boys, from the nightmares to the belief in the existence of a beast. From the moment the first littlun claims to have seen snake-monster in Chapter 2, even the hunters begin having nightmares of their own. In Chapter 5, Jack, addressing Ralph, says, “You said they dream and cry out. Now they talk not only the littluns, but also my hunters sometimes talk of a thing, a dark thing, a beast, some sort of animal.” (p. 83). Indeed, the boys’ fear of the beast becomes an increasingly important aspect of their lives. The fact that all the boys on the island are younger than thirteen greatly affects the amount of fear that control them. Their cries can only reverberate within the walls of their own nightmares.

Further, a little boy named Phil dreams of weird animals, saying, “And I was frightened…and then I saw something moving among the trees, something big and horrid.” (p. 85) His mind is so obsessed with “beasties” it simply refuses to accept the reality that it is Simon he see in the dark. As a matter of fact, imagination and fear shape their illusory description of the beast which the twins, Samneric, describe, “There were eyes, teeth, claws. The beast followed us, nearly touched me.” (p. 100) [Question: Is this the way you intended to write this part? Your original posting made them appear like sub-topics.] But beast, it was not; it was a dead parachutist.

Fear of the beast totally conquers their minds, making their brains too crippled to think straight. Their imaginations are so powerful, so overpowering and wild that they fail to see the fear for what it is: the beast that impels them to crime.

Fear so control them to the point of believing and doing anything, even trying to regain peace and freedom from fear itself by killing the beast. Thus, when Simon comes stumbling out of the dark forest while the boys are doing a victory dance, everyone surrounds him, chanting, "Kill the beast! Cut his throat! Spill his blood!" (p. 152) Believing him to be the beast, they poke savagely at him with their spears until the “Beast” is dead. The beast is dead, indeed, and fear has just taken an innocent life.

However, not all the boys are too affected by fear. Ralph and Piggy struggle to be logical.

When the topic of fear is brought up during one of their assemblies, Ralph declares boldly, “The thing is Fear can't hurt you any more than a dream. There aren't any beasts to be afraid of on this island.... Serves you right if something did get you, you useless lot of cry-babies!" (p. 82) Ralph, in fact, is so intent on convincing others that there is nothing to fear. In any case, fear is harmless, he believes.

Piggy takes a scientific, rational approach. “Life is scientific. … I know there isn’t no beast…but I know there isn’t no fear, either.” (Chapter 5, p. 84) Instead of being the least worried about the beast, letting fear consume him, Piggy refuses to let fear control him, calmly fighting back with knowledge and reason.

Jack, too, is unafraid; he is carefree. During one of the assemblies (Chapter 5), he says, “Well then, I’ve been all over this island. By myself. If there were beast, I’d have seen it. Be frightened because you’re like that - but there is no beast in the forest.” (p. 83) He tries telling the littleuns there is no beast, even as the littleuns are so overcome by fear they fear doing anything, anyway. But Jack remains confident and unafraid. To him, there is no beast; he fears no beast. The only thing he fears is the persistent refusal to find the truth, face it and analyze what’s causing it.

The boys, of course, seem not to realize the truth that the only beast is the one within themselves, the one they create and recreate but refuse to confront and accept. Only Simon, the calm one, has the courage to ponder, “'Maybe there is a beast.... Maybe it's only us."

And so the boys’ struggle through their worst fears. Refusing to reason and face reality, they suffer in ignorance, breeding beasts of every shape and in every delirious circumstance. And they live in the island of their minds, evolving beasts of their own creation.

And so they panic. And kill.

Answer 2

It's excellent - you've done very well there! I'd just suggest 2 very minor word changes. Instead of "Simon comes to this conclusion" possibly use "Simon arrives at this conclusion" - it's just a variant because "come" appears a few times in the same area. Also, instead of "Hobbes states that humans are naturally selfish" maybe "Hobbes argues that humans are naturally selfish". But really, your essay is exceptional - must be an A+ at least!

Answer 3

i think its Spectaculiar for an ESL student. I love the introduction.

Answer 4

soz
dat is WAY 2 long 4 me 2 read