I apply for the job ^^ Correct my sheets, please?

Question

(if i apply for a sales assistant at Virgin megastore )

EDUCATION:
Please tell us about any qualifications or awards you possess that you that you think are relevant to the role.
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I've studied electronic engineering at University of Ulsan in South Korea. I'm a final year student. but Now I'm taking a year off to study British culture and English.

PREVIOUS EMPLOYMENT:
Current Job/Situation-Reason for leaving.
(We're not looking for a list of to and from dates, more an overview of what you're currently doing and how long you've been doing it)
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I had worked at TESCO for six months(JULY 2005~DEC 2005)
At that time, I belonged to Customer service center. So I Particularly arranged the property and helped customers parking.

Previous Job/Situation-Reason for leaving.
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At the end of 2005, I planned to travel around China with my friends. So I quitted the job.

Answer 1

Hi, this looks ok, just a few basic grammar mistakes. Try something like this: (wasn't sure what you meant by "arranged the property" - I am assuming you meant you kept the area free of litter, or were stocking shelves?)

I have studied electronic engineering at the University of Ulsan in South Korea. I am a final year student, however I am taking a year off to study British culture and English.

I worked for Tesco for six months (July 2005 -Dec 2005)
I was employed at the Customer Service Centre. My duties involved assisting customers in the car park and keeping the area tidy.

I left the job as I planned to travel in China with friends. I am now seeking employment for the duration of my gap year.

Answer 2

EDUCATION:
Please tell us about any qualifications or awards you possess that you that you think are relevant to the role.
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I studied Electronic Engineering at University of Ulsan in South Korea. I'm a final year student but now I'm taking a year off to study English and British culture.

PREVIOUS EMPLOYMENT:
Current Job/Situation-Reason for leaving.
(We're not looking for a list of to and from dates, more an overview of what you're currently doing and how long you've been doing it)
---->
I worked at TESCO for six months(JULY 2005~DEC 2005)
At that time, I belonged to Customer service center. It was ther that I helped to organise the store and deal with customer's parking issues.

Previous Job/Situation-Reason for leaving.
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At the end of 2005, I decided to travel around China with my friends so unfortunately had to leave.




Now just copy and paste! Not this bit obviously!

Answer 3

You studied electronic engineering at University of Ulsan in South Korea and now u wanna be i till girl for virgin?

Good to see these student grants aren't wasted

Answer 4

I don't get the 'Particularly arranged the property' bit. And I would also not say 'So I quitted the job' For starters its bad grammer but the best thing to say is that you handed in your notice, or terminated your employment.
Never use the words quit. Gives a bad impression to your potentially new employer!!
Good luck with the application

Answer 5

right here is your hazard to let us know another issues approximately your self,i.e.previous artwork, skills or adventure which you have that would make tou applicable for a job. -----> i'm Sociable and useful. I appreciate working as portion of a set and continually try to ascertain harmonious relationships with different individuals of the gang. I continually do my superb so as that the gang can get its superb effect. What attracted you to prepare for at Virgin Megastores? ----> i've got been in london for 3 months. i elect to adventure each little thing that london life has to grant. i could surprisingly elect to benefit adventure as an worker of Virgin Megastores using fact..... let us know approximately your hobbies exterior of artwork. ---> I appreciate strolling, (upload extra right here eg. reading, writing, sight seeing etc) Do you have the different artwork, learn commitments that could desire to impact your availability for artwork? ---> confident, i'm presently reading an English direction at Malvern college (state circumstances you're unavailable) better of success :o)

Answer 6

looks ok to me, but be honest with them about only looking for temp work.