If you are booksmart: Please help me add two more sentences onto this paragraph--thanks!?

Question

"The Twelfth Amendment solved a specific problem that came about in the election 1800. Prior to the amendment, whoever received the majority of electoral votes won presidency and the runner-up became vice president. In 1796, the president and vice president elect were from different parties, causing some difficulties in governing. In the election of 1800, the top two candidates, Thomas Jefferson and Aaron Burr, received the exact same number of electoral votes and so ensued a tie between two men of the same party. The Twelfth Amendment allowed candidates to run as a president and vice-president "team" specifying to which office each candidate sought and was electable. "

This needs to be SEVEN sentences long, I have 5 up there...If you want to CRITIQUE that up there, I say go for it. I could use any help I can get because I honestly do not find myself a strong, but "TO THE POINT" writer. Thanks again, I really appreciate it.

Answer 1

I see one run on sentence that needs to be split. I also see two others that should be combined into one

That said, a good writer never pads the piece. The whole idea is to make it as clear & concise as possible. As a writer, the only legitimate way to extend this is to add information.

I just did a search & on the first page I opened & found the answer to your problems - with an "s".. Your info or the web page info is incorrect, one or the other There was enough other info to expand the reason for the tie.

After a quick search, I found additional info & an error you may wish to correct. This is a much better version than the 3 sentences I wrote earlier, correct? That is what I mean by clear & concise.

You've done all right so far. just a little more..

Answer 2

Ralph Nader became into score a canoe mutually as sipping on his flask of gin and tonic.The Mastadon observed Nader out on the water, and pulled on his Fruit-of-the-Loom underclothes as a go well with.He then marched out to the canoe and helped himself to a drink from that flask.

Answer 3

You should end it with a summarizing sentence about why this is better. Also, maybe say something about how we function now. Maybe even what it would be like if we didn't have this amendment.