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Life is filled with uncertainties and converging from what's going to happen next, but one needs to be prepared for everything and anything to move right along. This is a little something I have believed in the past couple of years of my life, and it has proved to be a mark of remembrance. My life has been filled with joyful times, but as you might guess, there have also been sad ones. However, what has passed remains in the past, and I've learned to cherish and remember the good times but learned from the bad times. My life these days has not been so great, but I find no sense in complaining. I always try to keep a happy face because no one, no matter what they may say, cares about what's going on in your life. Everyone has his or her own problems to deal with. There is one thought in specific that never leaves my mind. I think about it day and night even thought I try to ignore it. However, there are things that you just can't ignore and a great impact in my life took place as my gra

grandmother died, and the days which my mother stood beside me as I needed her help. This moment and this special person left a affection in my life which I may never condone, nor shall I intend to.
Throughout years of my life, there have been moments which I was lost, uncertain, and cynical. Yet my mother guided me through these moments cherishing me with no doubt and strength in which I never knew was possible. If not for her, I believe I may not have been in college to this moment. She gave me an ambition in which I'll place all my effort to sharing it. If not for my mother, I knew I would not be in this world and for that I thank her with all my heart. She raised me as a baby, to a toddler moreover a child and alas to an adult. I cannot imagine how arduous it might have been to raise someone like me. I always heard stories how difficult I had been as a little boy, and as I endure through these moments, I thank her for all she's done. She changed me in a aspect which made me the p

which made me the person I am today. Events in my life took place which I knew it would have been impossible to conceive if not for her. I remember the moment as I lost my grandmother, it was the first time I ever had been through a family member's death, I went through a phase which made me change is a unexpected way. I never forgot the moment of her death, yet today I feel convalescent thanks to my own mother. She taught be that life had to move on and that events much like this took place in every day lives. I know that in mostly every persons heart, especially mine, there lies a consciousness that a mother is a hero to every one in a aspect we should all acknowledge. She provided me shelter and care in which I will thank her for the rest of my life, even if her life ends, I will always thank all that she has consummated for myself.
Yet through time the event that changed my life as well, which left me a scar and healed thanks to my mother, was the day my own grandmother died. T

The last grandparent I had, and the only one which I can remember. She was just like my mother, she kept me blissful as I was next to someone I always loved and always will. She taught me a new language, unfortunately it is slowly escaping my memory, she represented a world I had never seen before. Every year my whole family visited her in the summers; she lived farther than anyone can imagine and it was Sao Paulo, Brazil. In that country I took notice of all the poverty since to distinct it was everywhere most of the time. Before I would have been uneasy to be around someone who was in need for money, but all thanks to my grandmother she taught me all that is needed to be known about them. From this day forward whenever I have a spare change and I encounter someone in need of that spare money, I'm always obliged and grateful to give them whatever I have. I know it's a great feeling to help someone, and my grandmother taught me these ideas in which I barely had any time to prosper. I k

I know that she was a wise women, and that I'll never forget her. Yet the day her life came to an end from cancer, I realized I can never neglect this moment. I commemorate the moment I visited her in the hospital room and how I watched every inch of her perish. She looked so weak and I never saw the strength that she always contained in her beady eyes, and this saddened me in a great way. I learned many importances from her, and yet her death left me a mark I will never forget. Till this day I wish she'd be here, but thanks to my mother once more, life always moved on.

I know it's long and that maybe it needs revising, but don't worry about that. Just please read through it, don't have to read all of it, just skim and give me a fairy long conclusion about half a page long or however long you like, PLEASE. Thank you!

Actually this is for my brother AND I'M TELLING FORGET THE REVISING JEEZ!!!!!!!!!!! THIS IS A ROUGH DRAFT!

Answer 1

well, i'd say you need to do some serious editing on your essay, in general. you are using inappropriate word choices throughout the body.

examples:
"it has proved to be a mark of remembrance" - no offense, but wtf!?! what is a "mark of remembrance? how did your belief "mark" you?


"This moment and this special person left a affection in my life which I may never condone, nor shall I intend to." - do you know what "condone" means? it is not a word that is appropriate, here.


but...i'll give you a conclusion, anyway. it won't match your style....but, oh well...you can fix that. (it will be obvious to a person grading your paper)

conclusion:

On our journey through life, we are faced with many scary and tearful situations; these circumstances can drag us down, if we let them. I choose to find the joy and the goodness in these moments and cherish that, rather than dwell on sorrow. This attititude that makes me who I am.


have fun editing.

Answer 2

Is it a true story? If so, sorry about your grandmother.

A conclusion doesn't need to be long. Keep it simple - often shorter is better. How about something like:

Life is all about passages and changes. My grandmother lives on in her children and grandchildren and in our memories. The torch passes to a new generation, and that is part of life. We will make her proud.

Answer 3

ok, this paper needs revised so badly its hard to get through it in the first place, (i dont mean to sound rude, im just telling the truth) and whats with the female avatar, and the reffering to yourself as a boy in the paper....just wondering i dunno maybe you're on someone else's name, anywhos im done now buhbye