What do you people think of this poem? it's short though?

Question

Why do we believe in love??
Why do we live with love??
Why do we live for love??
It’s because we try to believe in the one who created it,
It’s because we try to live with his love,
It’s because we try to live for his love,
It’s because we’re worth nothing without who created love,
It’s because we worth nothing without God and nothing worth it without us loving him…..

Thnk u all, I really apprecaite everyone's point even if he dissagrees with me, actually it really helps.
Special thx to askandill..., Star2-n-.

Don't worry Ted T!! you're right I asked, Ireally appreciat your point.
Special thx to Rooster/B, Lanchelle, and Sele0419.
You see guys English isn't my mother tongue, so I really admire any comment of an English fluent speaker, AGAIN, even if you don't like it, but would u plz, if you don't like it, mintion your reasons?

Answer 1

It is a nice poem !I would like it a lot better if the last word of the 1st line rhymed with the last word of the 2nd line and the last word of the 3rd line rhymed with the last word of the 4th line and so on. It gives the poem some life and rythem. don't get me wrong it is a nice poem. an example is
Why do we believe in love
Because we are taught by the Man above
You have a nice poem. Keep working at it and writing.

Answer 2

This poem starts of really good but the ending is kind of bland. In most creative writing the reader wants to enter your mind and feel what you are feeling. You did this rather well but that last line kind of left me. You need to end this type of poem with heart felt thought. Ask a question or tell your readers soemthing that maybe that would not have know such as

Love is us and we are love,
Then why is the hatred in so many of us?

But overall it was really good!!

Answer 3

Well, i think the whole idea of the poem is nice. It's a nice topic to write a poem about. but the answers (the "it's because of" parts) were too simplistic. and in this poem, the inquisitive nature of the speaker should prevail throughout because it would be more effective that way. (here, the speaker gives immediate answers to the questions, which makes it sound, forgive me for saying this, shallow).
i hope i helped. :)

Answer 4

I get the idea that you don't really know what poetry is. Poetry often uses particular forms and conventions to expand the literal meaning of the words, or to invoke emotional or sensual responses. Devices such as assonance, alliteration and rhythm are sometimes used to achieve musical or incantatory effects. Poetry's use of ambiguity, symbolism, irony and other stylistic elements of poetic diction often leaves a poem open to multiple interpretations. Similarly, metaphor and simile create a resonance between otherwise disparate images—a layering of meanings, forming connections previously not perceived. Kindred forms of resonance may exist, between individual verses, in their patterns of rhyme or rhythm.
You will need to learn what all that means and how to use it all in order to write poetry. I reccomend taking a class.

Answer 5

Any poem that attempts to harness something divine is worthy of praise. In this work, you have shown a remarkable truth about God and love. Although the poem is kind of simplistic and brief, it captures the heart, as well.

Despite its few flaws, it has dignity and elegance.

Answer 6

well my teacher makes us write alot of peoms and and i wrote one on love to :
some people decided that love is blind but i think love is beautiful,
everything and everyone can exprience it love mean to care and show comphrension love means to be a friend to be there when somone needs you the most love is like an election you choose who you love or what you love

Answer 7

Sorry. I don't really like it. It's not very good, the repetition is annoying and unecessary. It sounds very childish and not well-developed.

Answer 8

It's not Walt Whitman

Answer 9

Yawn!

Answer 10

Sorry. It's fairly ordinary. But you did ask.