be brutally honest. i just wrote it , so its not alot. im 12. and its about a real experience. please dont take it, sorry for even having to bring it up. here it is,
I thought you felt
the same way about me,
so i told you
and we agreed
that we'd go through this
together.
(chorus)
Why couldn't you just tell me the truth?
I believed you
you're such a jerk.
i cant believe it.
i wanted this to work.
i might post the rest of this song when i write it, if i get good feedback. what do you think?
2006-11-18 10:06:54 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
yes, im only 12. good idea for the word jerk dude.
2006-11-18 10:11:16 · update #1
it's not more than a monologue of an argument with a boyfriend.
but most of the popular songs are not more artistic than yours
so you, don't worry
but your lyrics must have a story,an emotion,must be a little bit deeper.but i guess you can modify it,when you grow up
a little suggestion,sorry!
2006-11-18 10:24:13 · answer #1 · answered by j.c. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What does the music sound like ? The words make sense
2006-11-18 18:12:17 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It seems like it would become a good song. you just need to finish it and get a great tune to it and BAM you could be on the next american idol
2006-11-18 18:13:48 · answer #3 · answered by madilina23moose 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good start hun. if i were you id think of a better word for 'jerk' because it kind of dumbs the song down to a less mature level. if you want it to be taken seriously, that is...
2006-11-18 18:09:18 · answer #4 · answered by idbangrobertplant 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow, youre only 12? thats very good.
2006-11-18 18:08:34 · answer #5 · answered by lcw 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's really good!!!!!!!!!
Are u sure your only 12??!!!!!!!! =)
2006-11-18 18:10:29 · answer #6 · answered by Joker 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its good ......... but keep working on it !
2006-11-18 18:34:01 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋