Third, traveling on the “Underground Railroad” was a dangerous journey due to harsh weather. They had to keep going for ten to twenty miles until they reached a safe house where they would eat and rest for the night. It didn’t matter if it was raining or snowing, the slaves focused on being freed. During this time, many people tried to track down these escaping slaves and taking them back to their plantations for a reward, otherwise known as a bounty. Considering the risks, Harriet made nineteen trips on the “Underground Railroad”, rescuing family members to freedom.
I'm 13 and having trouble. Any suggestions?
2006-11-17 14:00:05 · 5 answers · asked by ♥Whatever♥ 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Third, traveling on the “Underground Railroad” was a dangerous journey due to harsh weather. Travelers had to keep going for ten to twenty miles until they reached a safe house where they would eat and rest for the night. It didn’t matter if it were raining or snowing; the slaves focused on being freed. During this time, many people tried to track down these escaping slaves and take them back to their plantations for a reward, otherwise known as a bounty. In spite of these risks, Harriet made nineteen trips on the “Underground Railroad”, rescuing family members to freedom.
2006-11-17 14:05:19 · answer #1 · answered by hayharbr 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
ten to twenty miles - where they on foot? that would be good to add. Using the word slaves too much, try using a thesaurus, for words like refugee - one who flees for safety. A thesaurus is the best friend when writing a paper. Using the same word too many times gets annoying. Overall though, it sounds good. You are on the right track and smart for asking for suggestions. Good luck!
Oh and spelling, "escaping slaves and TAKE them back..."
And though it is nice of them, do not use someone else's words, it must be age appropriate. Stick with what you have and just improve it a little.
2006-11-17 22:09:04 · answer #2 · answered by crct2004 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
try not to use they so much..try using other names for slaves like mentioned above from the other user...outside of all the other corrections made by the other users i say that u did exceptionally well!!! hopefully u get an A
2006-11-17 22:23:48 · answer #3 · answered by 11KDM92 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
During this time - that sentence doesn't make sense with the word "taking" - the verbs are n't the same tense. Otherwise, I think you have done pretty good. :)
2006-11-17 22:04:35 · answer #4 · answered by MissHazel 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
One of the big problems I think is that you put "first" and "second" and third" in the begining of every paragraph.
2006-11-17 22:12:16 · answer #5 · answered by jlok93 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋