The reason I cry
I love them all
but they hate me
im a child, stupid
ugly, imperfect
this is the reason I cry
I see it in their eyes
wishing I would shut up
acting like true friends
but talking behind my back
this is the reason I cry
trying to be perfect
wearing rings
necklaces, and bracelets
but still not good enough
this is the reason I cry
always feeling sad
always tired and weak
always wanting to break
always trying to smile
this is the reason I cry
wanting to die
but thinkin of my future children
and how happy I can make them
how much I can love them
this is the reason I smile
feeling like I only have one home
one family, many sisters and brothers
loving the church, and feeling loved
having them surround me
this is the reason I smile
Plz tell me wut u think of this poem
2006-11-16 12:21:42 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
i like ur poem, it is very expresive.this poem 4 me means that every person in this world has it happiness and sadness in their lives n every person in this world has mistakes, by that i mean no one is perfect. Where do u get that poem? It's realy nice, I like it.....
2006-11-16 12:49:42 · answer #1 · answered by Crystal 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
"It barries"? How does a brook barry? Or do you imply bury, which might be "buries?" The waft is well till the final couple traces. Cackles and flickers do not rhyme, it is very pressured. You'd have got to difference that. Also, I'd advocate looking to fluctuate the phrases. Eight traces that cross it somethig it whatever it whatever will get a bit ancient. But it is a respectable poem. Do a few sharpening up and it might be particularly well. :)
2016-09-01 13:49:08 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that you express yourself very well. So in that regards I like your poem. I can not say that I like the fact that you feel sad,unpopular, hurt, and suicidal. I can say that I like your outlook on your future. It is very pleasing to know that you know, that your future is what you will make of it. I am also very impressed that you are aware of the values of family and God. Since you just wanted to know about your poem then I will respect that and stop here. Please just allow me this; I think that you are an amazing person, with a fantastic future..I believe in you!
2006-11-16 12:38:26 · answer #3 · answered by dr.cocktail 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow. that sounds very good. keep writing poems you could go somewhere with them. =]
2006-11-16 12:45:12 · answer #4 · answered by sarah m 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
1800 suicide
2006-11-16 21:04:17 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋