I look at you,
your soft eyes, your chickfluff hair.
You are just a child,
You cannot bear the blame.
Perhaps
You thought it wasn't important.
You did not understand why.
You meant well.
I want to defend you, to tell them
it was because you're so perfectly untouched.
But even if I make excuses into eternity,
(and God knows I would.)
The truth will remain,
Unblinking, logical:
One day you'll have to grow up.
If not now, when?
It's not my best but I'd still really appreciate any comments.
Thanks.
x
2006-11-16 10:42:39 · 8 answers · asked by lady_s_hazy 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I will do...nothing... with it!
I'm very much in training and I dont pretend to be great yet, but I'd love to be a writer someday. Maybe once I've studied all the greats to death and done a degree, and poss a phd!
Thanks all you nice commenters tho!
2006-11-16 10:53:15 · update #1
wOW THAT TOUCHED ME
2006-11-16 10:44:47 · answer #1 · answered by Abena 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice write. I also write poetry as well. I have a few listed in my blog at my yahoo 360. check them out if you like. It is under boobtubechef.
2006-11-16 18:54:04 · answer #2 · answered by boobtubechef1996 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, I love it! You've got talent! Keep writing!
2006-11-16 18:45:40 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its ok if you add more indescrible words i think it will make a even more lovely poem!
2006-11-16 18:45:17 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's really good, I like it! Can you write me one for my cursh?! I'll answer questions you need!
2006-11-16 18:44:56 · answer #5 · answered by The Answer Man 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. What will you do with it? You might like www.poetry.com
2006-11-16 18:45:44 · answer #6 · answered by honiebyrd 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its pretty good
2006-11-16 18:45:23 · answer #7 · answered by streetracer7534 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really like this...
2006-11-17 19:35:38 · answer #8 · answered by smokey 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋