Should I compare my love to a white rose?
He is more romantic and more unique.
The rough wind blows, but we always stay close;
I hold on tight to his tall, strong physique.
I never thought I’d be the one he’d love,
And I’m just as sure as the sky is blue
He loves me as he loves the Lord above,
And I can truly say I love him, too.
My only wish is to grow old with him,
To always be able to see his smile,
To be there for him when the sun is dim,
To hold him for more than a little while.
The wind may blow every petal away,
But my love for him will forever stay.
2006-11-16 10:40:08 · 12 answers · asked by ♥Ms. Heart♥ 5 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Yeah see we had to write a love sonnet and compare the person to a flower, god/goddess, or animal so I chose the white rose because it's my favorite flower...oh and I can't name the poem "Sonnet" such and such...
2006-11-16 10:47:47 · update #1
I didn't ask for comments on it...HOWIE.
2006-11-16 10:50:31 · update #2
I like them all but I love this one: The Man Behind The Rose
Thanks you all!
2006-11-16 10:55:23 · update #3
Petal to the Metal
Winter Rose
White Rose
Fallen Petal
My Hymn to Him
The Beautiful Rose
The Man Behind the Rose
My Love, My Life
2006-11-16 10:41:46 · answer #1 · answered by Strat Com 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is an rather solid attempt, highly if that is your first sonnet! i won't be able to grant a lot help contained in the identify branch... i might want to represent ______ Sonnet, fill contained in the sparkling. yet the following is how i imagine you're prepared to strengthen it: i imagine the numerous reason you've a issue with the ending a million.) The rhyme you've for "sonnet" isn't organic- it doesn't "bypass" in any respect. and 2.) It lacks a turn. attempt having the poem turn. listed the following are some examples of poems to envision out: "layout"- Robert Frost, "Sonnet sixty 5" - William Shakespeare, "In Bondage" - Claude McKay, and only for interesting "Sonnet" - Billy Collins. Take particular observe of Shakespeare's sonnet. He spends the first 12 lines of the poem speaking about the ravages of time and then contained in the most suitable 2 receives to the numerous aspect of the poem. The turn is often more effective illustrated in Italian sonnets, so have a glance at those to boot. desire i have been effective :)
2016-11-29 05:11:09 · answer #2 · answered by youngerman 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love's Eternal White rose
2006-11-16 10:53:31 · answer #3 · answered by Joe S 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
That's really pretty..i would suggest something like my wish, white rose, love for you, eternal love..idk, just some thoughts
2006-11-16 10:49:48 · answer #4 · answered by Me 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
"Eternal Rose of the Wind"
2006-11-16 10:44:47 · answer #5 · answered by Scott M 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
How about : Until the Final Sunset
2006-11-16 10:47:36 · answer #6 · answered by Philosophy Prof. 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
A MAN GOOD ENOUGH FOR A ROSE
2006-11-16 10:59:27 · answer #7 · answered by sara 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I would say the name will come to you. Or you could jsut name it sonnet considering that is the exact same thing Shakespeare wrote jsut in different words!!!!!!
2006-11-16 10:43:38 · answer #8 · answered by jessica_sexgrl 1 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Eternal Love
What ever you do, do not submit it to http://www.poetry.com they are a rip off company...take ur money to publish your poem in a book...
2006-11-16 10:45:42 · answer #9 · answered by nfocuz00 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
rewrite your sonnet. it is really bad
no meter
no rhythm
no imagination
sorry
keep trying though
the first part is awful.. put more thought into it
you will be a great writer someday
2006-11-16 10:46:40 · answer #10 · answered by Mr. love 3 · 1⤊ 3⤋