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The Macedonian army which consists of 25,000 Macedonians, 7,600 Greeks, and 7,000 Thracians and Illyrians defeated the Persian king Darius III the Medes numeral times. Darius III army consisted of 40,000 Persians and 20,000 Greeks. Alexander’s army annihilated the Persians on the banks of Granicus.
A week ago the Macedonian army's encountered the Persian forces under the command of King Darius III himself at a mountain pass at Issus in northwestern Syria.
Darius's army greatly outnumbered the Macedonians, but the Battle of Issus ended in a big victory for Alexander. Ten's of thousands of Persians, Greeks, and other Asiatic soldiers were killed and king Darius fled in panic before the Macedonian phalanx, abandoning his mother, wife, and children behind. They are been treated with respect out of consideration for their royalty.
The Macedonians spotted the lights from the Persian campfires and encouraged Alexander to lead his attack under cover of darkness. But he refused to take advantage of the situation because he wanted to defeat Darius in an equally matched battle so that the Persian king would never again dare to raise an army against him.
At the beginning of the battle the Persian forces split and separated the two Macedonians wings. The wing of general Parmenio had been backing down, but Alexander's cavalry rode straight after Darius and forced his flight like he did at Issus.
Alexander continued his pursuit of Darius for hundreds of miles from Persepolis. When he finally caught up to him, he found the Persian king dead in his coach. He was assassinated by Bessus, the satrap of Bactria which now proclaimed himself "King of the Kings", assuming the title of the Persian kings. Bessus has escaped but he is on the look out by Alexander’s army. Darius is been given a royal funeral next week.

PLEASE THIS IS AS IF HE WAS STILL ALIVE! copy it and put the corection on your answer. or tell me the errors by paragraph and sentence number. Please I really need someone to do this. Thanks

Answer 1

The Macedonian army which consists of 25,000 Macedonians, 7,600 Greeks, and 7,000 Thracians and Illyrians defeated the Persian king Darius III the Medes numeral times. Darius III army consisted of 40,000 Persians and 20,000 Greeks. Alexander’s army annihilated the Persians on the banks of Granicus.
A week ago the Macedonian army's encountered the Persian forces under the command of King Darius III himself at a mountain pass at Issus in northwestern Syria.
Darius's army greatly outnumbered the Macedonians, but the Battle of Issus ended in a big victory for Alexander. Ten's of thousands of Persians, Greeks, and other Asiatic soldiers were killed and king Darius fled in panic before the Macedonian phalanx, abandoning his mother, wife, and children behind. They are been treated with respect out of consideration for their royalty.
The Macedonians spotted the lights from the Persian campfires and encouraged Alexander to lead his attack under cover of darkness. But he refused to take advantage of the situation because he wanted to defeat Darius in an equally matched battle so that the Persian king would never again dare to raise an army against him.
At the beginning of the battle the Persian forces split and separated the two Macedonians wings. The wing of general Parmenio had been backing down, but Alexander's cavalry rode straight after Darius and forced his flight like he did at Issus.
Alexander continued his pursuit of Darius for hundreds of miles from Persepolis. When he finally caught up to him, he found the Persian king dead in his coach. He was assassinated by Bessus, the satrap of Bactria which now proclaimed himself "King of the Kings", assuming the title of the Persian kings. Bessus has escaped but he is on the look out by Alexander’s army. Darius is been given a royal funeral next week.











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Answer 2

The Macedonian army, which consists of 25,000 Macedonians, 7,600 Greeks, and 7,000 Thracians and Illyrians, defeated the Persian king Darius III the Medes numerous times. Darius III's army consisted of 40,000 Persians and 20,000 Greeks. Alexander’s army annihilated the Persians on the banks of Granicus.
A week ago the Macedonian army's encountered the Persian forces under the command of King Darius III, at a mountain pass located at Issus in northwestern Syria.

Darius's army greatly outnumbered the Macedonians, but the Battle of Issus ended in a big victory for Alexander. Ten's of thousands of Persians, Greeks, and other Asiatic soldiers were killed. King Darius fled in panic before the Macedonian phalanx, abandoning his mother, wife, and children. They are being treated with respect out of consideration for their royalty.

The Macedonians spotted the lights from the Persian campfires and encouraged Alexander to lead his attack under cover of darkness. But he refused to take advantage of the situation because he wanted to defeat Darius in an equally matched battle. His goal, so that Persian king would never again dare to raise an army against him.

At the beginning of the battle the Persian forces split and separated the two Macedonians wings. The wing of general Parmenio had been backing down, but Alexander's cavalry rode straight after Darius and forced his flight like he did at Issus.
Alexander continued his pursuit of Darius for hundreds of miles from Persepolis. When he finally caught up to him, he found the Persian king dead in his coach. He had been assassinated by Bessus, the satrap of Bactria which now proclaimed himself "King of the Kings" - title of the Persian kings.

Bessus has escaped but he is on the look out by Alexander’s army. Darius is been given a royal funeral next week.

Answer 3

Anything I think should be different I marked with 3 astericks and then put the correction in parenthesis.
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The Macedonian army which consists of 25,000 Macedonians, 7,600 Greeks, and 7,000 Thracians and Illyrians defeated the Persian king Darius III the Medes numeral***(numerous) times. Darius III army consisted of 40,000 Persians and 20,000 Greeks. Alexander’s army annihilated the Persians on the banks of Granicus.
A week ago the Macedonian army's encountered the Persian forces under the command of King Darius III himself at a mountain pass at Issus in northwestern Syria.
Darius's army greatly outnumbered the Macedonians, but the Battle of Issus ended in a big victory for Alexander. Ten's***(Tens) of thousands of Persians, Greeks, and other Asiatic soldiers were killed and king***(King) Darius fled in panic before the Macedonian phalanx, abandoning his mother, wife, and children behind****(If you want to use 'abandoning' you need to remove 'behind'. If you want to keep 'behind', you need to change 'abandoning' to 'leaving'). They are been***(being) treated with respect out of consideration for their royalty.
The Macedonians spotted the lights from the Persian campfires and encouraged Alexander to lead his attack under cover of darkness. But he refused to take advantage of the situation because he wanted to defeat Darius in an equally matched battle so that the Persian king would never again dare to raise an army against him.
At the beginning of the battle the Persian forces split and separated the two Macedonians***(Macedonian) wings. The wing of general Parmenio had been backing down, but Alexander's cavalry rode straight after Darius and forced his flight like he did at Issus.
Alexander continued his pursuit of Darius for hundreds of miles from Persepolis. When he finally caught up to him, he found the Persian king dead in his coach. He was assassinated by Bessus, the satrap of Bactria which***(who has) now proclaimed himself "King of the Kings", assuming the title of the Persian kings. Bessus has escaped but he is on the look out by Alexander’s army***(This sentence is wrong but I'm not quite sure how to fix it). Darius is been***(being) given a royal funeral next week.

I won't swear that that's everything but hopefully it will help.

Answer 4

"The Macedonian army which consists of 25,000 Macedonians, 7,600 Greeks, and 7,000 Thracians and Illyrians defeated the Persian king Darius III the Medes numeral times." .... I added a comma and also, it needs to flow better. Try this: "Consisting of thousands of Macedonians, Thracians, Illyrians, and Greeks, the Macedonian army defeated the Persian king, Darius III the Medes, numeral times." (the numbers are insignificant. you can add them, but if you do, I'd make it 2 sentences.)

"Darius III army consisted..." should be "Darius III's army consisted..."

It's good for a first draft. Hope this helps!

Answer 5

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Answer 6

The Macedonian Army(which consists of 25,000...Ilyrians),.
Otherwise the paper is fine. you will make a great journalist.

Answer 7

dont take the easy way out, if u need help ask ur teacher...

Answer 8

ita good