a wall of stone and steel is all that protects my heart from breaking.
will it be enoutgh to keep the tears from running?
can it possibly be strong enough to keep me safe inside?
will i always feel the hurt of the world and want to run and hide?
can a wall of stone and steel keep me safe inside?
can it keep out all that would like to hurt me?
can it keep me from feeling?
a wall of stone and steel can't possibly save me.
is there a wall out there i can build around my heart?
is there to be some material out there to build such a wall to save me from the thoughts that would crush me.
a wall to keep me safe from the world that would love to crush me.
the wall that secures my heart is getting week and old.
soon it will fall and the feelings and thoughts will come crushing down inside.
my wall is soon to fall and all will be lost.
will i be able to survive?
could i possibly be able to build a wall more stronger than before?
a wall of stone a steel is protecting my heart from breaking.
but when another blow comes will it be able to stand or will it be no more?
2006-11-16 06:57:56 · 7 answers · asked by willow 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
i think that this is a really good poem. a little sad, but it's real. it doesn't hide anything with euphemisms or hidden language. i like it. two thumbs up.
2006-11-16 07:05:02 · answer #1 · answered by Sam B. 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not always ought to rhyme nevertheless it demands to hit my feelings. I feel readability of expression is main as good. I do not love to moment bet what I'm studying approximately. I regularly seem for what I time period "poetic gem stones"within the textual content.
2016-09-01 13:35:55 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it!! It sounded original. You have talent I write poems myself. I actual wrote a book and looking to get it published real soon
2006-11-16 07:47:18 · answer #3 · answered by Kiwi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
as a fellow poet I think it is very good, you got the message over,it was a pleasure to read.
2006-11-16 07:10:55 · answer #4 · answered by poetrygirl on line 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like this poem...reading this poem; you feel the pain and sadness and confusion of a breaking heart. keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!
2006-11-16 09:04:12 · answer #5 · answered by smokey 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
um I don't like it. for example...
you should have "weak" instead of "week".
and "more stronger"? "stronger" or "more strong." not both.
2006-11-16 08:06:23 · answer #6 · answered by she who is awesome 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it.
2006-11-16 07:06:53 · answer #7 · answered by courage 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋