I posted this before, and people liked it.they wanted me to finished it. before i only had the first 2 paragraphs. yes i wrote it. no it doesnt reflect my life in any way at all. Rate this on a scale of 1-10 (10 being the best)
Wandering detatched, all on her own
Known as the "Ghost Daughter"
A foreboding presence, bitter and taunting
killed by her beligerent father.
The despairing spirit, once loving of life
Never truely passed on
Her father so callous to end her life
She hopes for love, but gets none
Nowhere to go, no one to love
She waits for the hint of affection
Wandering through empty space while
Going through an infinity of affliction
Only seen on the darkest of moons
Up on the old farm ranch
The new family finds her haunting
As she apears hanging from a tree branch
Flickering images of murder
Imaginary blood splattered on the wall
Faint sounds of dying cries
And an invisible memory of it all
2006-11-16 06:45:38 · 14 answers · asked by manatee_love 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i give you 8
cause im jelous
2006-11-16 07:23:58 · answer #1 · answered by sweet18apparatus 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I can only give you a 4. Sorry, but it just doesn't have what it takes to grab you. It is OK, and I think you could do much better. I can see a lot of potential there. Don't ever give up, as you will some day become a good poet. I hope this helps. Good Luck!!!
2006-11-16 06:50:37 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
a million.Shelton Benjiman 2. Chris Benoit 3. Chris Jericho 4. Mick Foley 5. Hardy Boyz 6. Christian (keeps) 7. Shawn Michaels (hbk and the rock are on good of the cage hbk great kicks him back into the hoop and hbk climbs out to win) Its stable i cost it 8.5/10 i didnt like how brother d von wasnt in a tag adventure. i think of hes greater proper in tags
2016-10-15 15:31:44 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would give this poem a 10! It was very dark and scary. Very descriptive and imaginative. Reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe. Glad you finished it! Keep up the good work!
2006-11-16 06:49:09 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I give it a 8
2006-11-16 06:48:55 · answer #5 · answered by Tony G 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
8 out of 10. I certainly hope that you record all your writings and save them; if I still had all my writings since I was younger I could publish a few books...
2006-11-16 06:47:44 · answer #6 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think that is was a 10.bravo!!!i think that u should keep writing more like that. it reminds me of heroes.4 some odd reasons.well i got 2 go.give urself a 10.!!!!!
2006-11-16 06:50:59 · answer #7 · answered by *luxegirl* 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
You write well. I enjoyed reading it. I would give it a 9
2006-11-16 08:59:03 · answer #8 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'm dizzy..I'm dazed! I'm overall amazed! You need a rating then? The number I give is 10!
2006-11-16 06:48:39 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
i think its quite a good, a little gruesome maybe but a good effort. may i ask what this is for? have you heard that song. "janie's got a gun" by aerosmith.
8/10
2006-11-16 06:47:56 · answer #10 · answered by abby 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I like it, kind of dark, i'll give you a 9
2006-11-16 06:50:43 · answer #11 · answered by temperance 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋