I brought you in
You took a piece
Wasn't it enough?
It's never enough...
So why?
Why waste your breath
Why waste your time
Don't bring me this
I don't ******* deserve this
Now a days
I see you grin
That joy in your eye
I look in the mirror...
All that is in these eyes are pain...
Pain left behind
Just as you have left me.
Alone...
2006-11-15 22:47:17 · 13 answers · asked by Savanna 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
It's not a heart ache poem!
It's about an old best friend....
& of course it's self pity...
It's a poem with my stupid emotions coming out...
2006-11-15 23:14:41 · update #1
OMG! thats beautiful. especially the pain in the eyes. It's so sad...yet beutiful at the same time. You're a really good writer. I'm ok, and that's a compliment to me!
2006-11-15 22:50:56 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wanna get married ?
Seriously though, I like it and I dont at the same time. I agree with the other response that its a bit of self pity. Everyone has hearbreaks at one time or another.
IF this poem is born from your heart & based on true feelings.....The worst part of it all.......this guy still controls you still, to this very moment. Let it do, he was not worth it, but stop him from controlling you.
Those that anger you, control you.
Good luck with getting past it!
Well, if its not a lost love, most of what I said still applies, THOSE THAT ANGER OR HURT YOU, CONTROL YOU....
And since its about an old friend, it doesnt seem fitting......sounds like a lost love more than anything.....
2006-11-15 22:59:26 · answer #2 · answered by Falling to pieces 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like a good poem, very deep
2006-11-15 22:49:10 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm... the capitalizations have been stressful, and did you extremely propose continence contained in the 2nd to final line? Continence isn't any count number if or no longer you may administration your bladder.... in line with threat you meant working via your understanding.... or continents?
2016-10-04 00:49:41 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Time is a great healer..
Lots of fish in the pond...
If one got away ...
Change your spot...
Let them find you in your better way...
Well the poem is good but its the same story...they all hurt because we are sincere to our soul...
take care
diluted
2006-11-15 22:54:29 · answer #5 · answered by diluted.cynide 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would not call this a poem. It sounds more like a short story to me.
2006-11-15 23:49:14 · answer #6 · answered by Mira 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i dont really like poems but i though this sounded quite good. is for sumone who has hurt youin the past?
2006-11-15 22:52:28 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is a little self pitying.
Very cute though x
2006-11-15 22:51:48 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
self-pitying,,sorry but you did ask. people suck,,live and learn then put pen to paper.
2006-11-15 22:50:02 · answer #9 · answered by lex 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I am wiping a tear from my eye !
2006-11-15 22:48:45 · answer #10 · answered by rottentothecore 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋