Grammar check?

Question

In order to achieve quality and equitable education in California, educators and legislators should collaborate to remove the stumbling blocks of inadequate funding, poor resources, unqualified staffs, overpopulation, racism, poverty and lack of political power to prevent adequacy and inequity of education.

Or is there some other ways to interpret it?

Thanks!

Answer 1

Yep just say screw the system and home school.

Answer 2

Yes there is something wrong, wrong syntax! You can do it this way...

"In order to achieve quality and equitable education in California, educators and legislators should collaborate to prevent "inadequacy" and inequity of education by removing the stumbling blocks "such as/of" inadequate funding, poor resources, unqualified staffs, overpopulation, racism, poverty and lack of political power."

Answer 3

try this:

In order to achieve quality and equitable education in California, educators and legislators should collaborate to remove the stumbling blocks of inadequate funding: poor resources, unqualified staffs, overpopulation, racism, poverty, and lack of political power.

Don't add those last five words because that would just be redundant. Great thought though!!

Answer 4

"of political power to prevent adequacy and inequity of education."

Adequate means sufficent so when you said adequacy and inequity you're basicly contradicting yourself. Thats about it. Good sentence.

Answer 5

Technically it's not a run-on sentence.

Ya, good grammer :]
Might want to rephrase it to make it a bit less awkward and understandable though. Not like rephrase but move the words around, like the guy 4 answers above me did.

Answer 6

Sounds a bit like a run on sentence...

Answer 7

You have excellent grammar but I believe it would be "there ARE no mistakes" as a note to the above.

Answer 8

I think it's great the way it is. You're a good writer!

Answer 9

Not sure about the last bit. Did you mean 'inadequacy'?

Answer 10

It's great. There is no mistakes.