Why do I have these dreams
and flashbacks
of everything I lack
& things I wish I could take back
I rather stay awake
then suffer through the night
with the horrible images that
happen when I sleep
because there is one thing
i must keep
my sanity
Each & every day I pray
that I`ll be able
to make it through the day
All i do is lay
in bed
grasping for a breath
wishing i could be reborn
so I can take away all I`ve done
and start all over again
I lay there quietly
a million thoughts flood through my head
sometimes I wish I was dead
so all this would just come to an end
but at the same time thats one of my worst fears
I think the worst thing of all
is not being able to cry tears
I forgot the feeling or even how
Sometimes I wish I could just let it all out
but they are all inside of me
in a huge abyss of lost
thoughts,emotions,feelings
I`ve become emotionless,numb
like a cold dark bottomless pit
I yearn to feel
something
rather than
nothing.
2006-11-15 10:47:42 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
Very Good!I love to read and write poems,but let me give you a little advice!Whenever you post a poem for everybody to see, make sure you have a copy write so someone don't steal it!
2006-11-15 10:57:13 · answer #1 · answered by Sweetheart 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Young lady, I really feel for ya. Your poem reminds me of the many folks I have studied in the prison system. Folks who have remorse for their crimes. Murder in particular. The good news, there is a bright light out there. There is a path you can take out of the darkness. The first step for you is to gather up all the courage you have, walk out that front door, and find counsel. Depression can feel just like being in prison. But you are free. You can do what ever you want to with your life. You have two choices when you wake up in the morning. You can choose to be happy or you can choose to be sad. Get out of bed! Wake up your soul! There are many great people out there, who can help guide you out of the darkness and into the light. I will keep you in my prayers. God Bless
2006-11-15 14:46:20 · answer #2 · answered by Dorie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Annie Linex after the Urythemics on the album Deva, song title Tell me why is a more lyrical lament like yours. My only question is are you as attractive?
2006-11-15 10:59:33 · answer #3 · answered by namazanyc 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good indeed A lot of emotion went into that I bet, congratulations on the poem
Well that's my view anyway
2006-11-15 10:52:20 · answer #4 · answered by jimmyjock 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very emotional and descriptive and real!
I think at some point in all of our lives, we wish we could change something or do something different.
We are who we are and we do what we do.
2006-11-15 11:04:35 · answer #5 · answered by kitt_kattkitt 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Deeeeeeeeeeepppppp. I like it. Sad though, makes the reader feel boxed in, good one.
2006-11-15 10:57:11 · answer #6 · answered by This, That & such 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too depressing and you seem like a Garden State obsessed emo.
but I kinda like it.
2006-11-15 10:50:48 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good; I write poetry, and I've had a few published and this has huge potential.....Good luck in future.
2006-11-15 11:02:08 · answer #8 · answered by chikensnsausages 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get more comfortable with your rhyme scheme.
Check your spelling & grammer.
Be more illustrative if you choose similar subject matter again.
2006-11-15 10:56:08 · answer #9 · answered by Joan McBitch 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I though it was very good, vague but not too vague so that we still had your idea at hand. I really like your poem, reminds me of mine. :) good job
2006-11-17 06:49:08 · answer #10 · answered by im1canadain 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋