You dropped me off,
said you'd be back,
said you'd see me soon.
But it's been over a year now,
and that's the last I've seen of you.
Chourus:
Staring at that good old cieling what a familiar sight,
but the cieling is always there to look up too,
and I dont think I could bare another let down tonight.
As we grow up we learn,
that the one person who wasnt ever supposed to let us down probablly will.
And even though I know this,
Im still here,watching,waiting, as I count the raindrops collecting on the wondow sill.
As they threw thier caps into the air,
I searched the crowd anxiously, but I guess you coudn't be there.
Maybe you forgot about my big day, or maybe somthing got in your way.
Its my faoult for expecting so much..
^I dont like this verse but I need somthing along these lines here
Chorus:
I wrote you a letter
to tell you the great news.
You actually wrote back,
promised you'd be there when I said "I do"
I don't know what made me belive you,
but I thought that maybe you'd be there,
but I walked down that aisle alone,
I guess you didn't care.
Chourus:
2006-11-14 08:36:58 · 26 answers · asked by teenagewasteland 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
not bad for a 14 year old
2006-11-14 08:55:31 · answer #1 · answered by jvg49er 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
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2016-10-03 23:19:31 · answer #2 · answered by spies 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I have been writing songs for as long as i can remember...and i have learned that If you want to get into songwriting starting with what you feel is always good... keep on writing and you will continue to get better and better, perfection awaits you. I wish you the best of luck.
Peaches
2006-11-14 08:41:52 · answer #3 · answered by peaches 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it if you serious I am a producer (really) if you send me your stuff i will work on it fo free... (i produce housetranceand hardcore) but im always lookin fo fresh shizzit... Can you sing? It is always better if the artist can sign there work, 14 young voice but maybe.. if not get someone to sign it the way you YOU want and send it out to people like me fo tunin and quality.... It sounds good fo EMO SCREAMO (im in canada)
2006-11-14 08:43:37 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey lil girl you got talent! If I was a producer I would defenitely sign you to my record company! It is amazing that a girl your age wrote such a beautiful song! I really admire that about you and recommend you to keep writing songs that are like this one! AMAZING! Keep up the good work!
2006-11-14 08:44:45 · answer #5 · answered by Michuu 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good! But I agree that "as they threw their caps in the air" verse needs some work. Good job!
2006-11-14 08:39:51 · answer #6 · answered by cucutechick 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
to quote BB KIng in the epic rockumentary about U2"s Street s with no name tour, entitled "Rattle and Hum"..."Dem some aweful deep lyrics for such a young man"
Rock out little brother...and do what you feel is good, don't let other form that opinion for you.
2006-11-14 08:42:50 · answer #7 · answered by Doctor J. 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked it, but work on the difference between there and their. Maybe you typed this out quickly, but I'd work on some of your spelling. Also, it's hard to figure out what the rhythm would be.
Overall, 7.5 out of 10.
2006-11-14 08:46:58 · answer #8 · answered by ildjb@sbcglobal.net 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really good from the lyrics. but if i wanted to tell how the whole song would be i would need to know what the beat would be. but otha than that
A M A Z I N G! :]
♥
2006-11-14 08:46:52 · answer #9 · answered by ♥Amanda Way♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is freakin awsome!!! here is somthin you could throw in.
The thoughts in my head made me think of your touch,
Now all I can do is wish to be in your clutch,
But I guess being there for me was just too much,
2006-11-14 08:45:33 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋