The hush of the night resounds in my ear
Pure darkness, strengthened my fear
There’s nothing…even a flicker of light
The ambience brings coldness and fright
Here in the corner I’m struggling
Bursting in fear, still crying
Hands are numb and shaking
Desperate for a friend, I am longing
Strong woeful wind blows within
Makes me recall everything
On how they came and let me in
Then suddenly deserted, left me without anything
“Suffer the consequences,” that’s what they say
It’s my fault, I know, I regret it everyday
For their forgiveness, that’s what I pray
Can’t live without them, begging them to stay
“Sorry!” I’m crying it out loud
“Forgive me!” My knees are down in the ground
You don’t know how much you mean to me
Without you, I don’t know what my world would be
If you can’t forgive me, then….it’s okay
Just a smile of you, will lighten my way
I’ll never forget to have you, people, as my friends
I will love you all, even until my time ends.
im the one who composed this
2006-11-14 02:16:32 · 11 answers · asked by Angeline_Love16 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
wow superb.. r u a poet?
this is perfect... 100%
2006-11-14 02:20:14 · answer #1 · answered by sunflower 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the poem is lovely.But theres alot of pain in this poem.I think maybe if its you that this poem is about you need to find friends who can learn to forgive and forget. for we are not all perfect .rember the part in the bible that says you with out sin may cast the first stone. remind them of that beofre the keep condeming you.
2006-11-14 02:23:43 · answer #2 · answered by furby_lost 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sounds more like a love poem to me but that would make a good friendship poem if u change a couple of words around.
2006-11-14 02:20:28 · answer #3 · answered by LittleBit 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
actually its not very good i am sorry i hate to be mean but let me say it this way i personally dont care for it but then again what do i know right
2006-11-14 02:21:33 · answer #4 · answered by LT. DAN 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You succeed in conveying a lot of painful emotion.
2006-11-14 02:28:37 · answer #5 · answered by andy c 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its deep...
so if you like stuff that is deep yeah it would be a great poem...but for me i dont like that kind of stuff so it is okay...but i rather it be more of telling what you done wrong or at least hinting on it a little.
>_0
2006-11-14 02:41:33 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is nice, but yet very dark and sad.
2006-11-14 02:48:29 · answer #7 · answered by pradavee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think thats called plagerism!
2006-11-14 02:19:44 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's great!
2006-11-14 02:20:23 · answer #9 · answered by Manna 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yeah it's good
2006-11-14 02:26:04 · answer #10 · answered by ♥*♥Bahamian Gal♥*♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋