He also left an important mark on hip-hop through his invention of the electro funk genre and the Zulu Nation, an ethnically conscious grass roots organization.
2006-11-13 05:20:03 · 5 answers · asked by KittyKat 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Your sentence is good as it is. The only word I would question is "also". (I'm guilty of over-using it also!!) I would remove it if it isn't necessary to the meaning of the sentence. Best of luck.
2006-11-13 05:30:18 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 0⤋
No, it is not run on or too long and awkward. Just fine as it is.
Sue
2006-11-13 13:24:15 · answer #2 · answered by newbiegranny 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It will not be a run on if after "Nation" you delete the comma and insert "which is"
2006-11-13 13:44:59 · answer #3 · answered by Reecey 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds fine to me. :)
2006-11-13 13:29:22 · answer #4 · answered by kittikatti69 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no, it looks long but it's puncuated properly and sounds fine!
2006-11-13 13:27:50 · answer #5 · answered by Gingersnap 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋