Crying out for help but no one is there
Wishing My Love would show me one last ounce of care
In my heart My Love made me believe
But in the end My Love left me to grieve
I would have knelt down on a shattered knee
Just to ask My Love to marry me
I would have walked over a mountain of fire
To satisfy My Loves lasts desires
Even though these thoughts were in my mind
My Love left me without even looking behind
After My Love was gone my life fell apart
It felt like a knife was being drilled thruough my heart
Every day I ask myself Why?
Its not as if I didnt try
I finally realized I did nothing wrong
I should have seen it all along
From this lesson I will be more wise
As for My Love I will no longer despise.
Just curious I wrote it a long time ago and just found it.
2006-11-12 04:10:35 · 11 answers · asked by melucknope 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Marriage & Divorce
That's really good. It's touching.
Makes you think.
Sounds like you've went through a lot but allowed yourself to come to some great realizations and learn from it.
Hopefully your next loved one will respect and appreciate you more.
2006-11-12 04:20:05 · answer #1 · answered by Jax 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW !! I really liked it. You captured what everyone has felt at one time or another. Hope you are continuing to write. You have a gift that should be published.
2006-11-12 12:22:00 · answer #2 · answered by uspsrose 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
well i am not in to poetry but that one said alot....it is just about what every one has went through one time or another.....very good poem...write a few more....and make a book....;)
2006-11-12 12:42:57 · answer #3 · answered by wendy p 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love poetry! You did a wonderful job of expressing your feelings!!
2006-11-12 12:25:17 · answer #4 · answered by veronica c 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I really dont think those kind of lessone make you more wise they can make things harder if you hold on to them
The poem was really sad
2006-11-12 12:21:19 · answer #5 · answered by David R 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
All poems about love are very beautiful :)
2006-11-12 12:13:23 · answer #6 · answered by woo 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
I love it...
2006-11-12 12:16:41 · answer #7 · answered by Mechelle 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow! thats good! love it!
2006-11-12 12:24:31 · answer #8 · answered by lana 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very nice. I sent it to someone who can identify with it. Thanks.
2006-11-12 12:45:39 · answer #9 · answered by S K 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
IT IS VERY GOOD
2006-11-12 12:16:42 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋