Hey I just got done editing this poem. Let me know what you think of it, give me some feedbacks if you want, and rate it please (1 to 10, 1 being low and 10 being high).
Not titled yet
I wish you knew this other ride
Travels to a different side
Where everything just seems to be slowing
But the miles just keep on rolling
The road fades midnight black and blue
But chances are you have no clue
Most come here to post
Others to just get lost
To disappear
And then reappear
With clearer thoughts to look into
Finding that way to carry it through
I’m back on this road again
Allied by my very best friend
Penciling all the things I lack
And all the things I got right on track
All my missed chances
All those so close dances
And how all those dreamy dreams almost came true
If only I could just show you
2006-11-11 15:44:45 · 16 answers · asked by Ct_noicS 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Hm... I give your poem a 7/10. Your poem seems to go around the bush which is kinda hard to tell what you really are trying to say. I love the words you used, very clever and creative. I love the first stanza but the second stanza is kind of a blurr to me; and doesn't seem to connect with any of the stanzas. Your third stanza seems to tell what you wanted to say but it isn't that understandable enough and wasn't supported by the other stanzas especially the second one. Good peom but still needs some improvements. These are just my opinion 'ayt? :)
2006-11-11 16:58:56 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
This poem is relatively well for a newbie, there's defiantly a few excellent imagery in it, however it sorts of lacks course, its somewhat complicated, it begins off with you comfortable you will have located any one, however they don't seem to be particularly yours? And then they leave, that's a exceptional storyline, however you have to illustrate a factor within the poem after they go away. It does not relatively rhyme in locations, which I don't blame you for, rhyming poems are very very complicated, so perhaps you will have to simply take a look at non rhyming poems to start with. If you just like the notion of rhyming nonetheless, take a look at simply making it lyrical while spoken, counting the syllables in keeping with line is a well means to try this. Poetry will also be a laugh and really enjoyable, I consider you will have to keep, you may also even make a few cash! But you have to purchase a booklet on writing poetry to particularly get the satisfactory outcome, I advocate "the ode much less travelled: unlocking the poet inside" via Stephen Fry, he's high-quality and and really wonderful.
2016-09-01 11:07:23 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
6 1/2
2006-11-11 16:05:15 · answer #3 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8
2006-11-11 16:00:39 · answer #4 · answered by A 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good a 9 1/2.
2006-11-11 15:49:28 · answer #5 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
5 sorry...some of the lines don't rhyme and the pattern doesn't continue throughout the entire poem (some sentences are too short)
I'm just being honest...and the only reason I gave you a low score is because I've taken poetry in english class so I know about poems and how to write them!!
good luck at writing poetry though!...if you want to keep doing it, take a class!--it will help! :)
2006-11-11 15:54:12 · answer #6 · answered by Yanks4Life23519 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is pretty good I rate it between an 8 and 9.
2006-11-11 15:57:12 · answer #7 · answered by ♥♥Bree♥♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very Good ~ 10 all the way.
2006-11-11 16:02:22 · answer #8 · answered by Gaia Weeps 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was good, not everyone can express themselves through words. I have written poems, it makes me feel good inside. And for the other readers of your poem, Not all poems have to rhyme! #7
2006-11-12 02:19:28 · answer #9 · answered by Adam 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would give it a 9.
2006-11-12 03:51:34 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋