Im still working on my song and I have half the lyrics to it. Plz let me know what you think.
From a bright land of signs and lovers lies
When I'm climbing back to the sands of times
If your home alone, and sleep wont be friend
Wish for a magicans curse to see her once again
Travel the world when she's on the other side
Is this a place were love just won't survive
Chorus x2
Watching her stroll,
Wooden Boardwalks and wooden floors
Watched her fly away
In my arms she'll find a place
2006-11-10 20:09:12 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Yes I wrote it myself...but I dont like it because it doesnt have much rhythm, I was listening to Jimi Hendrix, all along the watch tower, and I hear the words as they fall on the beats. I feel like you cant hear where that would be with my song. IF you where to read Jimi henrix's lyrics you can actaully hear the song through the words.
2006-11-10 20:26:47 · update #1
Yeah actaully I always forget bob dylan wrote that song because Jimi Hendrix just makes it sound like its his.
2006-11-10 20:33:32 · update #2
You're trying to be philosophical whilst writing a love song...good formula, but it doesn't work for you! Sorry!
Work on your vocabulary as well:
sands of time not times
if you're home alone not your
won't be a friend not friend
Good luck!
2006-11-10 20:38:50 · answer #1 · answered by moloch2006 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
dose it have a melody or music backing
I have written many songs...am always interested in new work
whats it called
its like...your painting pictures with words (lyrics)
oh bob dylan wrote along the watch tower
hendrix loved dylans work
2006-11-11 04:27:52 · answer #2 · answered by murphys_lawyers 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did you write it yourself?
If you did it is really good!
It seems like a hit already, I`m not joking! I`ve been writting for 10 years now and all I can say it is really good! Keep going! ;-)
2006-11-11 04:22:09 · answer #3 · answered by parapligiko A.E. 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It is pretty cool and I liked it keep going with yoh song it is very tight.
2006-11-11 04:13:56 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good!
2006-11-11 04:17:31 · answer #5 · answered by Jou-Jou 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's nice
2006-11-11 04:31:34 · answer #6 · answered by Raina 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋